Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and personal, but it has some redundancy and minor grammar issues. Make the response more concise, correct small grammatical errors, and add a linking phrase for clarity. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid vague words like "scenarios."

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos lift my mood and help me reflect. For example, a picture of a vast landscape reminds me how small we are and makes me feel calmer.

제안: You express preference clearly but use filler words and have some grammar and word-choice issues. Remove fillers (uh), correct grammar (use articles and plural/singular forms), and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what aspects of rural scenery you like.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer quieter, more natural scenery. For instance, hiking in the mountains and walking along clear rivers relaxes me and helps me disconnect from city noise.

제안: The answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and a confusing ending. Avoid contradictory connectors (Although... but...), fix sentence structure, and be specific about what appeals to you in other countries. Keep it within three sentences and end clearly.

예시: I generally prefer views in my own country because I know them well and they feel familiar. However, I would love to visit Switzerland because its dramatic mountains and waterfalls, like the Rhine Falls, look stunning in photos and videos.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenarios because I can capture it and look at it when I am in a bad mood or to remind myself that we are so small in this world.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenes because I can capture them and look at them when I am in a bad mood or to remind myself that we are so small in this world.

Errors: 'scenarios' is odd collocation for views; 'it' refers to 'pictures' (plural) so should be 'them'. Suggestions: use 'scenes' or 'views' for natural collocation; ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent (pictures -> them).

× Actually, I prefer views in rural areas because uh, it has, uh, best scenery.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in rural areas because, uh, they have the best scenery.

Error: 'it has' refers to 'rural areas' (plural) so subject-verb agreement requires 'they have'. Also missing article before 'best scenery' -> 'the best scenery'. Suggestions: match verb to plural subject and include appropriate article: 'they have the best scenery.'

× Hiking down the mountains and uh, walking through the rivers really makes my heart at peace.

✓ Hiking down the mountain and, uh, walking along rivers really puts my heart at peace.

Errors: 'down the mountains' is less natural than 'down the mountain' or 'in the mountains'; 'walking through the rivers' implies wading through water—use 'along rivers' or 'by rivers' for walking beside them. 'Makes my heart at peace' is non-idiomatic; use 'puts my heart at peace' or 'calms my heart.' Suggestions: choose natural prepositions and idiomatic verbs: 'Hiking in the mountains and walking along rivers calms me.'

× Although I do prefer views in my country but I really want to visit Switzerland as I have seen many videos and photos about Switzerland and there is this beautiful waterfall which I really want to visit look.

✓ I do prefer views in my country, but I really want to visit Switzerland because I have seen many videos and photos of it, and there is a beautiful waterfall I would really like to see.

Errors: 'Although' and 'but' are redundant together—use one conjunction. 'As' can be used but 'because' is clearer. 'About Switzerland' is acceptable but 'of it' is more concise. 'Which I really want to visit look' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'I would really like to see' or 'visit.' Suggestions: remove redundant conjunctions, use 'but' alone, replace awkward phrase with 'I would really like to see.'