Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızı daha akıcı ve doğal hale getirmek için tekrar eden ifadelerden kaçının, dilbilgisi ve soru sözcüklerinin doğru kullanımına dikkat edin ve yanıtınızı bir konu cümlesiyle başlatıp ardından mantıklı bağlaçlarla destekleyin. Örneğin ‘I really like’ ifadesini fazla tekrarlamamaya çalışın, ‘how do they occur’ yerine doğru soru yapısını açıklama cümlesinde kullanın (ör. ‘how they form’). Ayrıca cevap uzunluğunu 3-4 cümle arasında tutun ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially clouds. I find them fascinating because they look so free and constantly changing. I often try to capture their shapes and colors, and I’m curious about how they form in the sky, which is why I read about cloud formation sometimes.

제안: Cümleleri daha düzgün bağlamak ve kesintileri azaltmak için konuşma içindeki duraklamaları (‘uh’) en aza indirin. Konuyu doğrudan ele alan net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından nedenlerinizi bağlaçlarla açıklayın. Örneğin ‘I feel happier when I am connected to nature’ cümlesini birleştirip detay verin (nerede yürüdüğünüz, hangi manzaraları sevdiğiniz gibi).

예시: I prefer rural areas because I grew up in the countryside near Brussels. I feel much happier when I’m surrounded by nature, for example walking through fields or forests, which helps me relax and appreciate peaceful views.

제안: Cevabınızı daha açık ve dil bilgisi açısından doğru hale getirmek için belirsizlik ifadenizi netleştirin ve ‘waves of other countries’ gibi kafa karıştırıcı ifadeler yerine spesifik örnekler verin. Ayrıca alternatifleri karşılaştırırken ‘both’ dedikten sonra neden her birini sevdiğinizi kısaça açıklayın. Yetersiz deneyimden söz ederken bunu daha doğal bir şekilde ifade edin (ör. ‘I haven’t traveled much abroad yet’).

예시: I like views both at home and abroad, but I haven’t traveled much yet, so I’m more familiar with scenery in my own country. At home I enjoy familiar rural landscapes, while I imagine that views in other countries could offer different cultures and coastal scenes I haven’t seen yet.

× I really like to take photos of them and I I really like to look at them because it feels free to me and I'm really curious about how do they occur.

✓ I really like to take photos of them and I really like to look at them because they make me feel free and I'm really curious about how they occur.

The clause 'how do they occur' incorrectly uses question word order inside a statement. Use declarative word order: 'how they occur'. Also 'it feels free to me' is unnatural; use 'they make me feel free' to refer to clouds (plural) and express the feeling clearly. Additionally there is a duplicated 'I'. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use declarative structure for embedded questions, and match pronouns and verb forms to the subject (they occur).

× Uh, I grew up in a rural area in Brussels and I feel. Happier when I am connected to nature.

✓ Uh, I grew up in a rural area in Brussels and I feel happier when I am connected to nature.

The sentence is split incorrectly: 'I feel.' followed by 'Happier...' creates a fragment. Combine into one sentence with correct capitalization: 'I feel happier...'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary sentence breaks and ensure the subject and complement stay together in one sentence.

× I prefer both, but I didn't have the chance of experiencing the waves of other countries.

✓ I prefer both, but I haven't had the chance to experience the views of other countries.

'Didn't have the chance of experiencing' is awkward and 'waves' is likely a wrong word choice for 'views'. Use present perfect 'haven't had' to connect past experience to the present preference. Also use 'to experience' instead of 'of experiencing'. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences relevant now and correct vocabulary ('views' instead of 'waves').

× That's why I am not sure about the answer of this question.

✓ That's why I am not sure about the answer to this question.

The correct preposition collocation is 'answer to a question', not 'answer of'. Use 'answer to this question'. Suggestion: memorize common noun-preposition pairs (answer to, dependent on, interested in).