Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar, avoid repetition, and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words for coherence and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, start with a direct statement (‘Yes, I enjoy…’), then give one specific reason and a brief example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me notice small details in my surroundings. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes to remember places I’ve visited, and at home I take photos of daily scenes to capture memories.

제안: Work on grammar (singular/plural, articles), clearer word choice, and organization. Give one clear preference sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid vague phrases like 'beauty stuff' and incomplete endings.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more relaxing. For example, I like forests and mountains where I can enjoy fresh air and natural scenery rather than busy streets.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a direct answer, then give clear supporting facts and an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'unique landscapes', 'diverse forests') and avoid colloquial fillers like 'like' and 'stuff'.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Taiwan has many unique landscapes. For instance, we have tall mountains, diverse forests, and beautiful coastlines, so I often explore different regions to enjoy varied scenery.

× I really enjoy taking pictures when I go travelling or just recording my daily life.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures when I travel or just recording my daily life.

Use the base form 'travel' after 'when I' for general habits; 'travelling' is a British gerund but here 'when I travel' sounds natural. Keep parallel structure: 'taking pictures when I travel or recording my daily life.' Suggestion: use 'travel' for simple present habitual actions.

× I think that is a good way to observe the environment around you and build a connection with this, your life.

✓ I think it is a good way to observe the environment around you and build a connection with your life.

Replace 'that' with 'it' for a cleaer dummy subject and remove the extra comma before 'your life.' 'This, your life' is incorrect pronoun use and punctuation. Suggestion: use 'it' as the subject and 'your life' without comma.

× And then I think that is really nice to record it.

✓ And I think it is really nice to record it.

'And then' is unnecessary here; use 'And' to connect ideas. Also use 'it is' instead of 'that is' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify connective words and use 'it' as dummy subject.

× I prefer views in rural area first because I think rural area have a nicest and release environment and 2nd is I think the views from the nature is the beauty stuff that's created by God so I think I can.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas first because I think rural areas have the nicest and most relaxing environment, and second, I think views of nature are beautiful things created by God, so I like them.

Multiple errors: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' (singular/plural issue). 'have' must agree with plural 'areas' — corrected. 'a nicest' is incorrect; use 'the nicest.' 'release' is wrong word; 'relaxing' fits. 'the views from the nature' should be 'views of nature' and 'is the beauty stuff' should be 'are beautiful things' to agree in number and use natural phrasing. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general categories, correct articles, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I prefer views in my country because we are the most beautiful islands in the east of Asia.

✓ I prefer views in my country because we have some of the most beautiful islands in East Asia.

'We are the most beautiful islands' incorrectly makes people equal to islands and misuses superlative. Use 'we have some of the most beautiful islands' to correctly describe the country possessing islands. Capitalize 'East Asia' and omit 'the' before it in this structure. Suggestion: rephrase to indicate possession and use 'some of the' with superlative.

× Where I'm living in Taiwan, we have like the tallest mountains in the East Asia and contains a lot of different types of forests and covers.

✓ Where I live in Taiwan, we have some of the tallest mountains in East Asia and many different types of forests and vegetation.

'Where I'm living in Taiwan' should be 'Where I live in Taiwan' for habitual fact (present simple). 'We have like the tallest' is informal; use 'some of the tallest.' Remove 'the' before 'East Asia.' 'Contains' is incorrect because subject is 'we' — use 'have' and restructure: 'we have... and many...' 'covers' is wrong word; 'vegetation' fits. Suggestion: use present simple for general facts, avoid filler 'like,' and ensure verbs agree with subject.

× That is the beauty stuff you should visit.

✓ Those are beautiful places you should visit.

Original sentence is awkward: 'That is the beauty stuff you should visit' mixes singular demonstrative with plural idea and uses informal 'stuff.' Use 'Those are beautiful places you should visit' to match plurality and natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'places' for locations and match demonstrative number.