Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choices (e.g., 'taking pictures from different perspectives', 'reflect different meanings'). Avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, taking photos from different perspectives—like a low angle or a close-up—can change the mood and highlight details, so I often experiment to create unique images.

제안: Answer directly and clearly with a topic sentence, and give relevant supporting reasons. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g., 'I'm really as good at sports' is confusing). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and provide one specific example.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and variety of the city. For instance, cityscapes with tall buildings, busy streets, and shopping areas interest me more than countryside landscapes.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Replace awkward phrases ('other country' → 'other countries') and avoid redundancy.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen much of my own country. For example, traveling abroad exposes me to different architecture, landscapes and cultures, which makes photographing new scenes more exciting.

× And I think take pictures in different perspective can reflect different meaning and it's unique for yourself.

✓ And I think taking pictures from different perspectives can reflect different meanings and be unique to you.

The verb 'take' needs the -ing form after 'think' when used with this structure ('think taking...'). 'Perspective' should be plural ('perspectives') to match the idea of different viewpoints. 'Different meaning' should be 'different meanings' for plurality. 'It's unique for yourself' is awkward: use 'be unique to you' to correctly use the adjective with the person affected. Suggestions: use gerund after 'think' (taking), pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple instances (perspectives/meanings), and use 'unique to someone' for correctness.

× So I think it's fun and I will take it.

✓ So I think it's fun and I will do it.

'Take it' is unnatural here because the verb for enjoying an activity like photography is 'do' or 'take photos'. If the intended meaning is to continue photographing, use 'I will do it' or 'I will take photos'. Maintain future tense with 'will' + base verb. Suggestion: use appropriate collocations: 'do it' for a general activity or 'take photos' for photography.

× Probably the urban area because I'm really as good at sports and the rural areas always links to the sports like walking or just, uh, riding.

✓ Probably urban areas because I'm not really good at sports and rural areas are always linked to sports like walking or riding.

'Urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' for general preference. The phrase 'I'm really as good at sports' is incorrect; likely intended 'I'm not really good at sports' (negation). 'Rural areas always links' has subject-verb agreement error: 'areas' requires 'link' or 'are linked'. Use 'are always linked to sports' or 'always link to sports'. Also remove filler 'just, uh'. Suggestions: ensure noun number matches context, use correct negation, and match verb to plural subject.

× And I prefer the cities and the shopping. So that's the.

✓ I prefer the cities and shopping, so that's why.

The original ends abruptly and uses unnecessary definite articles. 'The shopping' is unnatural; use 'shopping' as a general activity. The conjunction 'So that's the.' is incomplete; complete the thought with 'so that's why' or simply end the sentence: 'I prefer the cities and shopping.' Suggestion: avoid unnecessary articles with activities and ensure clauses are complete.

× Honestly maybe the other country because I have traveled around the country and see lots of views but I still have not yet explored the other country in many times so I want to see more new views and.

✓ Honestly, maybe other countries, because I have traveled around my country and seen lots of views, but I have not yet explored other countries much, so I want to see more new views.

Multiple issues: use plural 'other countries' to match general meaning. 'Traveled around the country and see' mixes tenses; after 'have traveled' use past participle 'seen'. 'I still have not yet explored the other country in many times' is ungrammatical: use 'have not yet explored other countries much' to express limited experience. End the sentence properly rather than trailing off. Suggestions: maintain consistent tense (present perfect with past participles), pluralize appropriately, and use 'much' or 'many times' correctly ('many times' used with simple past instances).