Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy and natural phrasing, avoid minor grammar mistakes and redundancy, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct plural and article use (e.g., "pictures of different views"), and say phrases like "I find it relaxing" more naturally. Also replace vague words like "nice places" with specific descriptions.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it relaxes me and helps me remember places. For example, when I travel or take walks I often photograph rivers and old bridges to capture the atmosphere. Last month, for instance, I used my phone to take several close-up and wide-angle shots of a river and an historic bridge.

제안: Work on grammar (verb forms, articles, prepositions) and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then support with specific reasons and an example using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Correct phrases like "I prefer rural views," "they are more natural," "after a busy week," and "I also enjoy the city skyline at night." Limit to 3–4 sentences for coherence.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are more natural and help me relax after a busy week. For example, I often go to nearby hills and green fields to enjoy fresh air and quiet. However, I sometimes appreciate the city skyline at night for its bright lights and energy.

제안: Focus on clear structure: give a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Fix major grammar and vocabulary errors (e.g., "different countries," "some views in my country are not very fascinating"). Avoid repetition and irrelevant fragments. Use linking words like "because", "for example", and keep sentences concise. Also be accurate with country names and descriptions (e.g., "Nepal is nearby and has stunning landscapes").

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures. For example, Nepal, which is near my country, has stunning mountain scenery and delicate temples that I find fascinating. I hope to travel and explore more countries to experience a wider variety of views.

× Well yes, I like taking picture of differences.

✓ Well yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

Use plural 'pictures' for general activity and correct article/ noun choice: 'picture' -> 'pictures'; 'differences' is wrong meaning, use 'different views'. Use plural when referring to multiple items in general.

× I find it relaxing and it helps me remember nice places.

✓ I find it relaxing and it helps me remember nice places.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct present tense describing habitual action. Provided for completeness.

× So I often take photos when I travel or go for a walk.

✓ So I often take photos when I travel or go for a walk.

Sentence is correct; no article changes needed. Included to maintain individual sentence corrections.

× For example, last month I took several photos of the river and the old bridge with my phone.

✓ For example, last month I took several photos of the river and the old bridge with my phone.

Sentence correctly uses past tense 'took' for a past event. No change required.

× Well, I've I prefer to rural views because they come and more natural and they help me relax after busy week.

✓ Well, I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more natural, and they help me relax after a busy week.

Multiple errors: remove extraneous 'I've I'; article 'the' needed before 'busy week' -> 'a busy week'; subject-verb agreement and adjective use: 'they come and more natural' is incorrect; use 'they are calmer and more natural'. Also 'to' before 'rural views' is unnecessary. Suggestions: avoid extra contractions, choose correct linking verb 'are', include appropriate article and comparative adjective.

× For example, I like to going to a nearby place to see a green fields and hills, but sometimes I also inside the city skyline at night for its lights.

✓ For example, I like going to a nearby place to see green fields and hills, but sometimes I also enjoy the city skyline at night for its lights.

Use gerund 'going' after 'like' rather than 'to going'. Remove article 'a' before plural 'green fields'. Insert verb 'enjoy' for 'also inside the city skyline' which was missing a verb. Add definite article 'the' before 'city skyline'. Suggestions: after 'like' use noun or gerund; match articles to countable nouns; ensure each clause has a verb.

× Actually I prefer difference country because some I countries view are not like very not fascinating.

✓ Actually I prefer different countries because some countries' views are not very fascinating.

Errors: 'difference country' -> 'different countries' plural; 'some I countries view' is garbled: use 'some countries' views' to show possession; remove double negation 'not like very not fascinating' -> 'not very fascinating'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and possessive structure for 'views'.

× But it is my near country.

✓ But it is a nearby country.

Use adjective 'nearby' rather than 'near' as a noun modifier and include article 'a' for countable noun 'country'. 'My nearby country' would imply ownership; 'a nearby country' is clearer.

× It is the Nepal.

✓ It is Nepal.

Do not use the definite article 'the' with most country names. 'Nepal' should stand alone. Use 'the' only with some country names (e.g., the United States).

× It is so amazing or viewers so delicated or so stunning.

✓ It is so amazing and the views are so delicate and stunning.

Several issues: 'or' misused instead of 'and'; 'viewers' (people) should be 'views' (scenery); spelling 'delicated' -> 'delicate'; need plural agreement 'views are'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns, conjunctions, and spelling, and keep subject-verb agreement.

× So I prefer other countries because it's my dream to going different explore different country.

✓ So I prefer other countries because it's my dream to go and explore different countries.

After 'to' use base verb 'go' not gerund 'going'. Also use 'explore' with base form after 'to' or use 'and' to connect verbs: 'to go and explore'. Make nouns plural 'countries'. Remove redundant 'different'. Suggestions: after 'to' use infinitive, ensure noun plurality, and avoid repetition.