Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Уберите повторения и заполнители (например, "frankly speaking", "uh", "umm") и постройте ответ по простой структуре: тема + причина + пример. Используйте связующие слова для плавности (because, so, for example). Также сократите фразы и используйте правильные слова (например, "views" вместо "pieces").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories and unique experiences. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets to remember the colours and atmosphere. I also take cityscapes when I travel to capture the feeling of a place.

제안: Избегайте неясных фраз (например, "Due to the facts at that time") и дублирования слов ("like like"). Начните с прямого утверждения, затем приведите причину и пример. Используйте связки (however, because, therefore) чтобы логично развить мысль.

예시: I prefer rural views because the countryside feels more peaceful and visually interesting to me. For instance, I love photographing rolling hills and small villages, as they offer unique textures and quiet atmospheres that I don't see in the city.

제안: Избегайте повторов и слов-паразитов, а также неясных фраз (например, "past fear"). Дайте ясно сформулированное мнение, обоснуйте его конкретной причиной и приведите пример. Следите за правильностью словосочетаний ("I try to go" или "I went" в зависимости от времени).

예시: I prefer views in the Balkans because the landscapes there are more varied and scenic than those I usually see in Russia. For example, I go to the Balkans every summer to enjoy dramatic coastlines and mountainous villages, which are great subjects for photography.

× Frankly speaking, frankly speaking, I do love taking pictures of different pieces, uh, from their, the perspective of my personal memory and umm, experience, uh, and uh, I really like umm, make photos of some places.

✓ Frankly speaking, I do love taking pictures of different places from the perspective of my personal memory and experience, and I really like to take photos of some places.

The sentence contains repetition and inappropriate word choice rather than a pure grammar category in the given list; however it matches issues with verb + -ing form (8) and sentence structure (26). Replace the repeated phrase 'frankly speaking, frankly speaking' with a single occurrence. Use 'places' instead of 'pieces'. Use the gerund 'taking pictures' correctly and change 'make photos' to the correct collocation 'take photos' or 'to take photos'. Remove unnecessary fillers ('uh', 'umm') for clarity. Suggestion: practise using correct verb collocations (take photos) and avoid filler repetitions.

× Due to the facts at that time, I live in city.

✓ Due to the circumstances at that time, I lived in the city.

This sentence has article errors (22) and tense/word choice issues (6/5). Use 'the city' with the definite article when referring to a specific city context, and 'circumstances' or 'facts' should be plural with appropriate collocation. Also, context indicates past reference 'at that time', so change 'live' to past 'lived'. Suggestion: choose correct articles ('the') for specific nouns and match verb tense to time adverbials.

× City landscape is an ordinary landscape for me.

✓ The city landscape is ordinary to me.

This contains article errors (22) and slight awkward phrasing tied to subject-verb agreement (27). Use 'The city landscape' with the definite article, and prefer 'is ordinary to me' or 'is an ordinary sight to me.' Suggestion: include the definite article with a specific noun and use natural collocations ('ordinary to me').

× Thus I do really like like rural areas and the atmosphere are there.

✓ Thus I really like rural areas and the atmosphere there.

This has repetition 'like like', subject-verb agreement (27) and unnecessary verb 'are' after 'atmosphere' making the clause ungrammatical. 'Atmosphere' is singular and should not take 'are'. Remove duplicate words and the verb to make a correct noun phrase. Suggestion: avoid duplications and ensure verbs agree with subjects (singular 'atmosphere' requires singular verb if used).

× Frankly speaking, I do love our Balkan landscapes more than Russian ones.

✓ Frankly speaking, I prefer Balkan landscapes to Russian ones.

This is mostly acceptable but can be improved for natural comparative construction (25). Use 'prefer ... to ...' or 'love ... more than ...' Either is fine; suggested correction uses 'prefer' for fluency. Suggestion: use consistent comparative patterns ('prefer A to B' or 'love A more than B').

× Uh, that is why I tried to go to the Balkans every summer in order to, umm, have an experience in such a past fear.

✓ That is why I try to go to the Balkans every summer in order to have that experience.

Original has past tense 'tried' conflicting with habitual 'every summer' and contains wrong noun 'past fear' likely intended as 'past year' or 'past years' or 'that experience'. This fits future/past tense misuse (7/5) and collocation issues. Use present simple 'try' for habitual actions and 'have that experience' for correct collocation. Suggestion: match tense to habitual actions (present simple) and use correct nouns ('experience') and phrases.