Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and verb tenses, remove redundancy, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Also fix repetition and article use (e.g., “a picture” → “pictures”) and tense consistency (use present simple).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel or even at home I often photograph landscapes and interesting man-made scenes because unusual light or composition catches my eye.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence that directly answers, then give specific reasons with logical linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer rural areas to urban ones”), avoid awkward phrases like “using rural areas” and unclear clauses like “I can sing from my small village.”

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I find natural scenery more appealing. For instance, I love watching sunsets over mountains and walking by rivers and lakes near my village, which helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct comparative structures (e.g., “more appealing than those abroad”), plural/singular forms and articles, and give one concrete example to support your preference.

예시: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it has lush green landscapes and diverse natural features. For example, our forests and mountain lakes are more familiar and appealing to me than the places I have visited abroad.

× Yes, I would love to take picture of different views, whether it's landscape or artificial things.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views, whether they are landscapes or man-made scenes.

Plural and noun form: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when speaking generally (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Agreement and noun choice: use 'landscapes' plural to match and replace 'artificial things' with 'man-made scenes' for natural phrasing (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Also replace 'it's' with 'they are' to agree with plural 'views' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and choose appropriate vocabulary.

× Whenever I visit outside or I'm in my home, I took a picture of different scenery that I that I that attracts my eyes.

✓ Whenever I am outside or at home, I take pictures of different scenery that attracts my eye.

Tense and verb form: 'I took' (past) should be 'I take' (present simple) to match habitual action (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 5). Preposition and phrase: 'visit outside' is incorrect; use 'am outside' or 'go outside' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Article and plurality: 'a picture of different scenery' -> 'pictures of different scenery' or 'a picture of different scenes' to match plurality (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 22). Pronoun/phrase: 'attracts my eyes' should be 'attracts my eye' or 'catch my eye' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 and 13). Remove repeated fragments 'that I that I that'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, correct prepositions, and idiomatic phrases like 'catch my eye'.

× I prefer using rural areas rather than urban areas because the countryside for a natural scenery appeal to my eyes, for example the sunset, mountains, enjoying rivers and lakes and that I can sing from my small village.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because the countryside and natural scenery appeal to me, for example the sunset, mountains, rivers and lakes, and I can rest in my small village.

Singular and plural issue: 'the countryside for a natural scenery' is awkward; use 'the countryside and natural scenery' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Subject-verb agreement: 'scenery appeal' should be 'scenery appeal to me' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). Word choice and structure: 'prefer using rural areas' -> 'prefer rural areas' and 'rather than' -> 'to' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 16). Verb choice: 'enjoying rivers and lakes and that I can sing' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'enjoy rivers and lakes' and 'I can rest' or 'I can sing' is odd—changed to 'rest' to fit context (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestion: simplify phrasing, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use clear verbs.

× I prefer scenery in my own country because it has green landscape and variety of natural beauties such as forest, mountains, rivers, lakes and etcetera and I found more appealing views in my own country rather than I have seen in abroad.

✓ I prefer the scenery in my own country because it has green landscapes and a variety of natural beauties such as forests, mountains, rivers and lakes, and I find more appealing views in my own country than I have seen abroad.

Article and singular/plural: add 'the' before 'scenery' and make 'landscape' plural 'landscapes' and 'forest' plural 'forests' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 1). Quantifier and article: 'variety of natural beauties' -> 'a variety of natural beauties' (Grammar Problem Type ID 14 and 22). Redundancy and word choice: remove 'and etcetera' (use 'etc.' rarely) (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Tense and comparison structure: 'I found more appealing views... rather than I have seen in abroad' is incorrect; use present 'I find' and comparative 'than I have seen abroad' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 19). Preposition: 'in abroad' -> 'abroad' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Suggestion: use correct articles, plural forms for countable nouns, correct comparative structure, and correct prepositions.