Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Отвечая, постарайтесь сделать ответ более плавным и конкретным: начните с чёткого топик-сентенса, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных примера и причину. Избегайте повторов (например, "I just keep them for myself" и "just to look through" избыточны). Используйте связки (for example, because, so) чтобы структурировать ответ и показать разнообразие лексики.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of interesting places. For example, I often snap shots of city skylines and seaside views when I travel. I keep most pictures on my phone because I enjoy reviewing them later and they help me remember special moments.

제안: Дайте более уверенный и чёткий топик-сентенс, уберите разговорные вставки типа "Uh". Расширьте ответ конкретикой: опишите, какие элементы сельской местности вам нравятся (поля, леса, реки) и используйте связки (because, especially, for instance) чтобы обосновать предпочтение.

예시: I prefer rural views because they make me feel relaxed. For instance, I enjoy photos of rolling fields and quiet rivers, which are especially soothing after a long day at work.

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте структуру яснее: используйте единую форму глагола после 'not only... but also' и более точные слова (e.g., 'give me a chance'). Добавьте конкретный пример страны или пейзажа, чтобы сделать ответ более содержательным и показать словарный запас.

예시: I prefer photos from other countries because they give me a chance to unwind and discover places I've never visited. For example, I enjoy pictures of Japan's cherry blossoms and Norway's fjords because they feel exotic and inspiring.

× Yes, I am really into taking photos of some fabulous spots.

✓ Yes, I'm really into taking photos of some fabulous spots.

This sentence is acceptable but contracted form 'I'm' is more natural in spoken English; no grammatical error. Suggestion: use contraction for naturalness.

× Unfortunately I'm not so good at it and I don't post my photos anywhere.

✓ Unfortunately, I'm not very good at it, and I don't post my photos anywhere.

Sentence needs a comma after 'Unfortunately' and 'not so good' is better replaced with 'not very good' for standard usage. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× I just keep them for myself in the gallery of my mobile phone just to look through.

✓ I just keep them in my phone's gallery to look through.

Redundant 'for myself' and repeated 'just' make the sentence wordy. 'Mobile phone' is more naturally 'phone' and 'gallery of my mobile phone' is better expressed as 'my phone's gallery'. Streamline to avoid redundancy.

× Uh, personally, I prefer the photos of countryside because they make me feel relaxing and comfortable, especially after a tiring day at work.

✓ Uh, personally, I prefer photos of the countryside because they make me feel relaxed and comfortable, especially after a tiring day at work.

Use the definite article 'the countryside' and omit 'the photos of' -> 'photos of the countryside'. 'Make me feel relaxing' is incorrect; use the adjective 'relaxed' to describe a person. 'Relaxing' describes the thing that causes relaxation.

× The pictures of other countries are of more interest for me because they not only gives me chance to reduce the stress and help me unwind, but also they show me the countries I've never been before.

✓ Pictures of other countries are more interesting to me because they not only give me a chance to reduce stress and help me unwind, but also show me countries I have never been to before.

Several issues: 'are of more interest for me' is awkward — use 'are more interesting to me'. 'Gives' should be 'give' to agree with plural 'they' (subject-verb agreement). Add 'a' before 'chance'. 'Reduce the stress' should be 'reduce stress' (general). 'They show me the countries I've never been before' is incorrect: use 'show me countries I have never been to before' and place 'to' after 'been'. Also remove redundant 'the' before countries.