Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct grammar, and give one concrete example. Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I like photographing seascapes and mountains because their colors and light change throughout the day, which makes each photo unique.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, explain reasons with specific details, and use linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular) and remove hesitations. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas because natural scenery helps me relax. For instance, I enjoy mountains and lakes since the fresh air and quiet atmosphere make walking and photography more enjoyable.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a direct statement, explain why with specific examples, and avoid vague or broken phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and correct country/article usage.

예시: I usually prefer views in other countries because it's exciting to see landscapes I haven't experienced before. For example, I would love to visit Scotland to photograph its dramatic mountains and lakes, which look very different from those at home.

× Oh yes, I do arrived during taking a picture or would you want to view so especially when I, uh, when I travel. So for example, taking the sea mountain. Yeah, I like it.

✓ Oh yes, I do. I take pictures whenever I travel, especially of the sea and the mountains.

The original contains several sentence structure problems: tense mix ('do arrived' is incorrect), awkward phrasing ('during taking a picture or would you want to view so'), and fragmented ideas ('taking the sea mountain'). The correction uses a clear present simple tense for habitual action ('I take pictures whenever I travel') and corrects noun phrases ('the sea and the mountains'). Suggestion: combine ideas into a single clear sentence, use present simple for habits, and use correct nouns and plural forms for countable items.

× I prefer rural area, I find natural scenery more relaxing than city view.

✓ I prefer rural areas; I find natural scenery more relaxing than city views.

'Rural area' and 'city view' are countable nouns that need plural forms when speaking generally. Use 'rural areas' and 'city views' to indicate general preference. Also use a semicolon or conjunction to join the two related clauses. Suggestion: when comparing general categories, use plural nouns ('areas', 'views').

× UH, especially like mountain and the lake and because I like.

✓ I especially like mountains and lakes because I enjoy being in nature.

Original is fragmented and repeats 'like' without a clear object. It lacks proper subject and verb for the clause 'especially like mountain and the lake and because I like.' The correction supplies a subject and verb ('I especially like') and uses plural nouns for general preference ('mountains and lakes'). Suggestion: complete the clause with subject + verb and use plural nouns for general statements.

× I probably prefer you in other country.

✓ I would probably prefer being in another country.

'Prefer you in other country' incorrectly uses 'you' instead of a gerund phrase or location expression and omits articles. The intended meaning is preference for being located in other countries. The correction uses 'being in another country' which correctly expresses preference for location. Suggestion: use 'being in' + 'another country' or 'other countries' and include appropriate articles.

× I think it's exciting to see the scenery that I've never seen before, for example a mountain and the lake in the Scotland where TRA travel is a bit.

✓ I think it's exciting to see scenery I've never seen before, for example the mountains and lakes in Scotland, where travel is a bit different.

The original has article errors ('the Scotland'), awkward phrasing ('a mountain and the lake'), and an unclear clause at the end ('where TRA travel is a bit'). The correction removes unnecessary articles ('Scotland' does not take 'the'), uses plural nouns for general scenery ('mountains and lakes'), and clarifies the final idea ('where travel is a bit different'). Suggestion: use 'Scotland' without 'the', prefer plural nouns when talking generally, and rephrase unclear modifiers to 'where travel is a bit different'.