Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子表达有信息但存在词汇和语法错误（如“salaries”应为“scenery”或“landscapes”，“friend”单数/复数不一致），有停顿词“uh”，结构稍显冗长。提高建议：1) 注意核心名词的准确性（例如 scenery/landscape/view）；2) 删除填充词并把句子控制在最多5句内；3) 用一到两句补充具体细节（何时/用什么相机或手机、喜欢拍什么风格）。示例句型练习：用简洁话题句+一两个具体细节，使用连接词使表达连贯。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures, especially landscapes when I travel. Photos help me remember special moments and places, and I often share my best shots on social media to stay connected with friends.

제안: 表达含义清晰但词汇错误较多（如“perfume”应为“prefer”，“skylights”用词不准），语法和搭配问题影响流畅。提高建议：1) 纠正常见词汇拼写与搭配（prefer, skyline, lights）；2) 使用连接词（because, so, therefore）使原因更连贯；3) 给出一两个具体例子（如夜景的哪部分、使用长曝光等）。保持答案在2–4句内。

예시: I prefer urban views because the city skyline at night, with all the lights and unique architecture, is very exciting. I also like experimenting with different angles and compositions to capture dramatic photos.

제안: 回答清晰且内容丰富，包含个人感受、原因与对比，但存在小错误（重复词scenery/sceneries，非正式口语'cause）。提高建议：1) 用更地道的连词替代口语缩略（because）；2) 避免重复词汇并稍微精炼，使句子更自然；3) 可以补充具体例子（提到国内哪些地方或回忆的细节）以增强说服力。

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to the scenery and there are many places I haven't seen yet. Local landscapes often remind me of childhood family trips, and it's usually cheaper and easier to travel domestically.

× I do like taking pictures and I personally prefer capturing the salaries when I traveled.

✓ I do like taking pictures and I personally prefer capturing the scenery when I travel.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 及词汇选择错用。此句中原写作 "capturing the salaries" 是词汇错误，应该是 "scenery"（风景）。另外时态与语境一致应使用一般现在时表示习惯性动作，故将 "when I traveled" 改为 "when I travel"（当我旅行时）。建议：注意选择正确名词，用一般现在时表达经常性或习惯性行为。

× Taking photos help me remember the special moments and the places, and I also enjoy sharing my photos with my friend on social media and uh, I'd like to experience.

✓ Taking photos helps me remember the special moments and places, and I also enjoy sharing my photos with my friends on social media, and I'd like to experience new things.

错误类型：现在分词/主谓一致与名词单复数问题。短语 "Taking photos" 作为主语，应与单数动词连用，故 "help" 改为 "helps"。另外 "my friend" 若指泛指应为复数 "my friends"；句尾不完整，补全为 "experience new things"。建议：注意 -ing 形式作主语时用单数动词；明确单复数；避免句子半截停住。

× A perfume views in urban area because there are something about the city skylights at night with all light and interesting architecture that can make me excited.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there is something about the city skyline at night, with all the lights and interesting architecture, that excites me.

错误类型：量词与单复数、词汇错误及结构问题。原句中 "A perfume views" 非法搭配，应为 "I prefer views"；"urban area" 应复数或前加冠词用复数 "urban areas"；"there are something" 与单数不匹配，应为 "there is something"；"skylights" 用词错误，应为 "skyline"；"all light" 应为复数 "all the lights"；从句结构也更自然改为 "that excites me"。建议：注意主谓一致、名词单复数与固定搭配，并选择正确词汇。

× And I also enjoy experience with different angles and lines to post the best, you know, photos.

✓ And I also enjoy experimenting with different angles and lines to post the best photos, you know.

错误类型：介词和动词形式使用错误。原句中 "enjoy experience with" 用法不当，正确为 "enjoy experimenting with" 或 "enjoy taking photos from different angles"；短语 "to post the best, you know, photos" 语序不自然，调整为 "to post the best photos"。建议：'enjoy' 后接动名词形式（-ing），并注意介词搭配和自然语序。

× A perfume views in urban area because there are something about the city skylights at night with all light and interesting architecture that can make me excited.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there is something about the city skyline at night, with all the lights and interesting architecture, that excites me.

错误类型：一般现在时使用不当与主谓一致（重复于前），此处表达偏好应使用一般现在时 "I prefer" 而不是不正确的开头。并且 "can make me excited" 更自然为 "that excites me" 表达常态感受。建议：用一般现在时表述喜好，用简单句式表达常态感受，确保主谓一致。

× Personally, I prefer the views in my own country 'cause I can feel more connected to the scenery sceneries and there are so many places I haven't visited yet.

✓ Personally, I prefer the views in my own country because I feel more connected to the scenery, and there are so many places I haven't visited yet.

错误类型：-ing/名词重复与连词缩写不当。原句中重复使用 "scenery sceneries"；"'cause" 为口语缩写，正式写作或考试中应写为 "because"；"I can feel more connected" 改为更自然的 "I feel more connected"（一般现在时）。建议：避免重复词汇，考试回答用完整词（不要使用俚语缩写），用自然的时态表达感受。

× and I also enjoy sharing my photos with my friend on social media and uh, I'd like to experience.

✓ and I also enjoy sharing my photos with my friends on social media, and I'd like to experience it.

错误类型：代词使用不当和句子不完整。应根据上下文使用复数 "my friends"（若泛指多人）；句末的 "I'd like to experience" 需要宾语，补为 "it" 或具体内容。建议：注意代词单复数一致及确保句子有完整的宾语。

× A perfume views in urban area because there are something about the city skylights at night with all light and interesting architecture that can make me excited.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there is something about the city skyline at night, with all the lights and interesting architecture, that excites me.

错误类型：冠词和不定项使用错误。原句以 "A perfume views" 完全错误，正确结构为 "I prefer views"；另有 "urban area" 应为复数或加冠词 "an urban area"，并且 "the city skyline" 前加定冠词。建议：注意冠词的使用，和主语结构的正确表达。