Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Focus on present simple for habits and past simple for specific trips.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel abroad I take pictures to remember the places I visited, and looking at them later makes me happy.

제안: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'urban areas', 'monuments', 'temples' or 'gurdwaras') and avoid listing without structure. Give one or two concrete examples and explain why you prefer them.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse subjects such as modern buildings, historical monuments and religious sites. For instance, I like photographing gurdwaras and busy streets since they show culture and activity.

제안: Be specific and avoid hesitation. State your preference, then give a clear example with brief details about a place and what you photograph there. Use correct nouns and avoid filler words.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because there are many scenic places to photograph. For example, I recently visited Goa where I took photos of beaches, wildlife and colonial architecture, which gave me a variety of interesting shots.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I was traveled to somewhere in a different country or a different place, I click the pictures and remember that place when I was so that pictures I feel really happy and I feel felt like this it was made very it was really good hobby of me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I traveled to a different country or place, I took pictures to remember it; those pictures make me feel really happy and I feel that it is a very good hobby for me.

The student mixed past and present forms incorrectly. Use past simple 'traveled' and 'took' for completed actions in the past. Also avoid redundant and confused phrases like 'when I was so that pictures' and 'I feel felt'; choose one tense and clear structure. Suggestion: keep past actions in past simple and separate clauses with commas or conjunctions to clarify meaning.

× I mostly prefer views in the urban area because there are the so many things that can be seen in the urban areas like factories, buildings, hospitals, franchise countries, other type of the cities like the different gurdwaras places or the I visited the gurdwaras because there are the places that can be visited and click the pictures of the and as you can show with to my friends that can visit this place so.

✓ I mostly prefer views in urban areas because there are so many things to see there, like factories, buildings, hospitals, and historic sites such as gurdwaras; I visited some gurdwaras and took pictures of them to show my friends.

The sentence misuses definite articles ('the urban area', 'the so many things', 'the gurdwaras places') and has general/plural noun issues. Use no article for general plural nouns ('urban areas') and use 'some' or no article for plural places. Also simplify and correct verb forms: 'to see', 'visited', 'took pictures'. Suggestion: use articles only when referring to a specific item and keep nouns plural without 'the' for general statements.

× I mostly prefer views in my own country because in my country there is so much places that can be visited there.

✓ I mostly prefer views in my own country because there are so many places to visit there.

This sentence uses incorrect subject-verb agreement with 'there is' + plural 'places' and redundant wording ('in my country' and 'there'). Use 'there are' for plural nouns and simplify 'that can be visited' to 'to visit'. Suggestion: ensure 'there is/there are' matches the noun number and remove repetition.

× And, uh, and click the pictures of the different kind of the places like Goa, that is the most kind of the place that is the visited there as last time.

✓ I also took pictures of different kinds of places, like Goa, which I visited recently.

The original is wordy and ungrammatical: 'click the pictures of the different kind of the places' and 'that is the visited there as last time.' Use 'took pictures' for past events, 'different kinds of places' for plural, and 'which I visited recently' to express recent past. Suggestion: use concise relative clauses and correct past tense verbs.

× And, uh, there's the, umm, some kind of the, uh, different kinds of the animals that can be. So in the Goa that are beats, uh, other things that can be clicked.

✓ There are also different kinds of animals in Goa, which are interesting to photograph.

The student misuses filler words and produces fragments ('that can be', 'that are beats') and incorrect noun phrases ('the animals that can be'). Use 'there are' for existence, 'different kinds of animals', and a clear infinitive phrase 'to photograph'. Suggestion: remove fillers, complete the sentences, and use clear verb forms and nouns.