Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but has several grammar and fluency issues and is a bit long and repetitive. To improve: 1) Use a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. 2) Correct verb tenses (use past tense for past events). 3) Avoid redundant words (e.g., “different different”). 4) Limit to 2–4 sentences and add one specific detail (which flower or which historical place). 5) Use a linking phrase when giving the example (e.g., “For example,” or “Last month,”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, last month I went on a trip with friends to Victoria and took many photos of the colourful gardens and the old government buildings. I like capturing both natural scenes and historic architecture because they show different sides of a place.

제안: The response answers the question but is vague and has grammar and vocabulary mistakes. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference and briefly why. 2) Use correct nouns and articles (e.g., “big buildings,” “down-to-earth things”). 3) Provide one specific contrast (e.g., skyscrapers vs. farmland) and use linking words (“on the other hand,” “while”). 4) Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler phrases like “etcetera.”

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. Urban areas have impressive skyscrapers and lively streets, while rural areas show peaceful farmland and traditional village life, which reveal local culture and daily routines.

제안: Your answer communicates the idea but is repetitive and has grammar problems. To improve: 1) Give a direct answer (e.g., “I enjoy both, but I prefer visiting other countries for variety”). 2) Avoid repeating words and correct sentence structure. 3) Provide a specific reason and an example (e.g., food, architecture, festivals). 4) Use linking words to connect ideas (“because,” “for example”).

예시: I enjoy views in both my own country and abroad, but I especially like visiting other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes. For example, I love seeing unique architecture and trying local street food, which helps me understand how people live in that place.

× Yes, I do like to take a pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I do like to take pictures of different views.

The phrase 'a pictures' mixes a singular article with a plural noun. Use no article with the plural noun 'pictures' (or use 'a picture' singular). Suggestion: say 'take pictures' for general activity or 'take a picture' for one image.

× For example I could say that last month I go on for a trip with my friends to Victoria and I usually click so many pictures over there of flowers of historical places.

✓ For example, I could say that last month I went on a trip with my friends to Victoria and I took many pictures there of flowers and historical places.

The sentence mixes past time markers ('last month') with present tense verbs 'go' and 'click' and the present habitual 'usually'. When describing a specific past event use past simple: 'went' and 'took'. Also remove unnecessary prepositions ('on for a trip' -> 'on a trip') and simplify 'so many' to 'many' for naturalness.

× I prefer both. I think when we go to urban areas we enjoy a big buildings and many more things.

✓ I prefer both. I think when we go to urban areas we enjoy big buildings and many other things.

'A big buildings' incorrectly combines the singular article 'a' with plural 'buildings'. Remove the article for plural nouns: 'big buildings'. Also 'many more things' is colloquial; 'many other things' is clearer.

× When we go to rural areas we enjoy like town to earth things like how people living over there and what's our culture etcetera.

✓ When we go to rural areas we enjoy down-to-earth things, like how people live there and what their culture is.

'Town to earth' is incorrect; the idiom is 'down-to-earth'. 'How people living' lacks the verb 'live' in base form for present simple: use 'how people live there'. 'What's our culture' is wrong referent; use 'what their culture is' to refer to people in those areas. Also prefer 'there' instead of 'over there' in this structure.

× I do prefer views in every country. I think when we go in different different countries, we get to know about their cultures, we get to know about their country, that what are the things, how people live over there, what are specialty of that country.

✓ I prefer views in every country. I think when we go to different countries, we get to know their cultures, we learn about the country, what things are typical, how people live there, and what specialties the country has.

Use 'go to' not 'go in' with countries. Avoid repeating 'different'. 'Get to know about their cultures' is better as 'get to know their cultures' or 'learn about their cultures'. 'We get to know about their country' is awkward; use 'learn about the country'. 'That what are the things' is incorrect word order; use 'what things are typical' or similar. 'How people live over there' -> 'how people live there'. 'What are specialty of that country' should be 'what specialties the country has' or 'what is special about the country'.