Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and use consistent tense. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent. Keep to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often photograph mountains and coastlines because I like dramatic light and wide perspectives. I also enjoy capturing wildlife, as it feels meaningful to document animals in their habitats. Overall, I prefer photographing nature rather than people.

제안: When stating a preference, give a clear topic sentence then two concise reasons linked with connectors. Avoid filler and tense errors: use present simple for general preferences. Use specific examples to support your reasons.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas. Firstly, the air is cleaner, which makes outdoor scenes look fresher and more appealing. Secondly, the slower pace of life means I can relax and take my time composing shots, for instance, photographing a quiet village at sunrise.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give a specific reason and an example. Use concise language and one linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer coastal views whether at home or abroad. I love coastlines because of the changing light and textures of sea and sand, which make each photo unique; for example, I enjoy capturing the sunrise over the cliffs near my hometown and similar scenes when I travel.

× Well, definitely, definitely yours, uh, when I was, when I was, I mean traveling, I love to take photos for different things like mountains or ocean and also wild animals.

✓ Well, definitely. When I was traveling, I loved to take photos of different things like mountains, the ocean, and wild animals.

The original sentence uses 'yours' incorrectly and repeats phrases; 'yours' is not appropriate here (incorrect pronoun). Also prepositions are wrong ('take photos for' should be 'take photos of') and tense is inconsistent ('I love' vs 'when I was traveling'). Corrected to past tense 'loved' to match the time frame 'when I was traveling', changed 'for' to 'of', and added articles where needed. Suggestion: use the pronoun that fits the meaning (avoid 'yours' here), keep tense consistent, and use 'photos of' when naming subjects of photographs.

× I think it's very meaningful and compared to taking photos of people or myself, I love to, uh, take photos for the nature.

✓ I think it's very meaningful, and compared to taking photos of people or myself, I prefer to take photos of nature.

The phrase 'take photos for the nature' uses an incorrect preposition and odd infinitive structure. 'Prefer to take' is more natural than 'love to take' in this comparative context. 'Photos of nature' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' for comparisons and 'photos of' for subjects of photography.

× Good job! - You answered the question and communicated your preference for the countryside clearly. - Your response showed some reasons (clean air, slower/relaxed lifestyle), which is good for coherence and relevance. - You used some appropriate vocabulary (clean air, relaxed life, countryside).

✓ You answered the question and communicated your preference for the countryside clearly. Your response gave reasons such as clean air and a slower, more relaxed lifestyle, which helps coherence and relevance. You also used appropriate vocabulary (clean air, relaxed life, countryside).

The original includes feedback list markers and an interjection 'Good job!' which are not part of the student's answer; as a sentence to correct, it required restructuring to a coherent paragraph. Also 'slower/relaxed lifestyle' is an unclear construction; use 'slower, more relaxed lifestyle'. Suggestion: avoid slashed alternatives in spoken answers and combine related adjectives properly.

× Make your answer more fluent and concise: avoid repetitions like "I love the I love the" and incomplete phrases.

✓ Make your answer more fluent and concise: avoid repetitions like 'I love the, I love the' and incomplete phrases.

This is feedback rather than the student's speech, but it contained an example of repetition. The correction keeps present-tense imperative 'Make' and clarifies the repeated phrase. Suggestion: when pointing out repetitions, present the repeated text clearly and avoid confusing punctuation.

× Use past/present consistency: "I think I'm more suitable when I was in the countryside" mixes tenses and is unclear.

✓ Keep past and present consistent: for example, say 'I feel more comfortable in the countryside' (present) or 'I felt more comfortable when I was in the countryside' (past).

The original notes tense inconsistency and includes the problematic example mixing present 'I'm' with past 'was'. The correction provides clear alternative sentences maintaining consistent tense. Suggestion: choose present or past and apply it throughout a clause.

× It's a tough question. I had to say, well, uh, I love the views in one specific area and it must be the coastline.

✓ It's a tough question. I'd have to say, well, I love the views in one specific area, and it would have to be the coastline.

The student's use of 'I had to say' is incorrect for expressing a present opinion; 'I'd have to say' or 'I would have to say' is the common modal phrase. 'It must be the coastline' is awkward for expressing preference; 'it would have to be the coastline' is more natural. Suggestion: use modal expressions like 'I'd have to say' to give opinions tentatively.

× I love the coastline view no matter what it is in my own country, like my hometown or it's in the other countries.

✓ I love the coastline view whether it's in my own country, like my hometown, or in other countries.

Original has awkward preposition and clause structure: 'no matter what it is in my own country' and 'it's in the other countries' are ungrammatical. Use 'whether' to present two alternatives and 'in other countries' (no definite article). Also contract 'it's' should be 'it's' or 'it is', but better to restructure. Suggestion: use parallel structure after 'whether' and omit unnecessary articles before plural 'other countries'.