Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Focus on clear sentence structure and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I don't usually take many photos of views, but I do when I visit northern Pakistan because the mountains, lakes and forests are breathtaking. For example, the fresh air and the green valleys encourage me to take a few pictures to remember the scenery.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons connected by linking words (for example, because, therefore). Correct grammar and avoid incomplete sentences; keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the air is fresher and there are mountains, lakes and wildlife. For instance, I often spend weekends in the countryside to relax and watch birds, which helps me recover from a busy week.

제안: Answer directly and concisely, then support your choice with a specific reason and a brief example. Avoid vague phrases and grammar errors; use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your point clearer.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because northern Pakistan has spectacular mountains and lakes. For example, tourists come from all over the world to see the lush valleys and clear rivers there.

× To be truly honest, I don't like taking pictures of different views, but sometimes when I travel to northern sides of Pakistan, there are many beautiful mountains, lakes, rivers and the most beautiful thing I enjoy there is nature.

✓ To be truly honest, I don't like taking pictures of different views, but sometimes when I travel to the northern parts of Pakistan, there are many beautiful mountains, lakes, and rivers, and the most beautiful thing I enjoy there is the natural scenery.

The sentence has awkward structure and incorrect phrase choice ('northern sides' and 'nature' used oddly). Rewrite improves noun phrase ('northern parts of Pakistan') and parallelism by listing items with commas and clarifying 'the most beautiful thing' as 'the natural scenery'. Suggest breaking long clauses into clearer elements and using consistent parallel lists.

× Like everything is green there.

✓ Everything there is green.

The original is a sentence fragment beginning with 'Like' and has unnatural word order. Removing 'Like' and placing the adverbial 'there' after 'everything' produces a complete, natural sentence. For improvement, avoid starting informal fragments with 'Like' in formal answers.

× I love to.

✓ I do.

'I love to' is incomplete because 'to' requires a verb (e.g., 'to take pictures'). Using the auxiliary 'do' ('I do') correctly responds to a previous statement. For clarity, supply the full verb phrase ('I love to take pictures') or use 'I do' as a short response.

× I love that fresh air there and many animals.

✓ I love the fresh air there and the many animals.

The sentence lacks parallel articles and has awkward phrasing. Adding definite articles ('the') before parallel nouns makes the list cohesive: 'the fresh air' and 'the many animals.' Also 'many animals' is vague; specify if possible. Ensure parallel structure when listing.

× From my perspective, I think the views in rural areas are the most beautiful ones like they are fresh is nature, lakes, mountains, animals, birds like I enjoy a lot there from my busy week.

✓ From my perspective, I think the views in rural areas are the most beautiful because they have fresh air, lakes, mountains, animals, and birds; I enjoy visiting them a lot after a busy week.

This sentence is long, contains fragments, and awkward phrases ('they are fresh is nature', 'like I enjoy a lot there from my busy week'). Rewriting clarifies cause ('because they have'), corrects noun phrases and list punctuation, and expresses the idea of visiting after a busy week. Use clear connectors and proper word order.

× I went there for weekends for my weekends and.

✓ I go there on weekends.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use simple present habit 'I go there on weekends' to indicate a regular action. If past tense was intended, use 'I went there on weekends.' Avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

× As far as I'm concerned I will go with use in my own country like the northern Pakistan is the most beautiful area ever been seen and most of the people from all over the world.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I prefer my own country; the northern areas of Pakistan are the most beautiful I have ever seen, and people from all over the world visit them for the scenery.

Multiple errors: incorrect modal/future phrasing ('I will go with use'), article errors ('the northern Pakistan'), tense and passive errors ('ever been seen'), and sentence fragmentation. Use 'prefer' for preference, plural 'areas', present perfect 'I have ever seen' for life experience, and active 'people... visit them.' Ensure correct articles and verb forms.

× Visitors visit Pakistan northern areas for nature.

✓ Visitors come to Pakistan's northern areas for the natural scenery.

Word order and possessive form are wrong ('Pakistan northern areas'). 'Visitors visit' is repetitive; use 'come to' or 'visit.' 'For nature' is vague—'for the natural scenery' is clearer. Use possessive form 'Pakistan's northern areas.'