Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and filler words, and give one or two specific details about what you photograph and why. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'scenery', 'landscapes', 'photograph'). Keep your answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often capture landscapes and cityscapes during my free time because I like to preserve beautiful moments and study light and composition. For example, I recently photographed a riverside sunset that had vivid colors and interesting reflections.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason with a contrast using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because'). Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use specific descriptions (e.g., 'calm countryside', 'vibrant city skyline') and keep to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I prefer views in both rural and urban areas, depending on my mood. Rural views are calming and rich in natural colors, while urban skylines are vibrant and full of architectural interest, so I choose between them based on the kind of images I want to create.

제안: Provide a concise, grammatical response and explain why with specific reasons. Avoid long, unclear time references and hesitations. If you have not traveled abroad, say so clearly and then give reasons you appreciate local views (culture, familiarity, convenience). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I haven’t traveled abroad yet, so I know the places here better. I also enjoy local landscapes and cultural scenery because they feel familiar and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I like taking picture of the different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker refers to multiple views in general. Use plural after 'taking' when referring to multiple items: 'taking pictures of different views.' Use no definite article 'the' before 'different views' unless specific views are meant.

× Umm, basically this is my, uh, beautiful hobbies.

✓ Umm, basically these are my beautiful hobbies.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural, so the demonstrative should be 'these' not 'this.' Also 'beautiful' can modify 'hobbies' but word order is correct as 'beautiful hobbies.' Ensure subject and demonstrative agree in number.

× Uh, that's like, uh, uh, who I in my free times, I visited it differently from place, uh, beautiful, beautiful places and capture beautiful, uh, picture, uh, and this is my, uh, one kind of hobby.

✓ That's like what I do in my free time: I visit different places and capture beautiful pictures, and this is one of my hobbies.

Many pronoun and phrasing issues: 'who I in my free times' should be 'what I do in my free time' (use 'what' to describe an activity and 'free time' singular/ununcountable). 'Visited' should be present 'visit' to match habitual action (present simple). 'Differently from place' should be 'different places.' 'Capture beautiful picture' requires plural 'pictures.' 'One kind of hobby' is better as 'one of my hobbies.' This correction addresses pronoun use and number and verb tense consistency.

× I prefer views in, uh, both areas.

✓ I prefer views in both areas.

Remove filler hesitation; the sentence is otherwise correct but avoid commas. Present simple 'prefer' is correct for habitual preference.

× Umm, but sometimes I uh, uh, visited the areas.

✓ But sometimes I visit those areas.

The speaker intends a habitual present action ('sometimes I visit'), so use present simple 'visit' not past 'visited.' Also use 'those areas' or 'these areas' instead of 'the areas' for clarity.

× This is very eye soothing places and eye soothing view and uh, sometimes, uh, I visited urban areas.

✓ These are very soothing places with soothing views, and sometimes I visit urban areas.

'This is' should agree with plural 'places' as 'These are.' 'Eye soothing' is unnatural; 'soothing' is sufficient. Maintain consistent tense: use 'visit' for habitual actions instead of 'visited.' Combine ideas clearly: 'soothing places with soothing views.'

× This is like a beautiful also.

✓ The urban views can be beautiful too.

Original lacks clear noun agreement. 'This is like a beautiful also' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'The urban views can be beautiful too' to match plural 'views' and add 'too' for 'also.'

× And uh, I like both, uh, every years in capture picture.

✓ And I like both; every year I take pictures.

'Every years' should be singular 'every year.' The verb phrase 'capture picture' is awkward; use 'take pictures.' Use present simple 'take' for habitual action.

× Uh, I prefer views in my own country because I don't visited other countries, uh, about, I, uh, like my country very, very much because, uh, now when I was born, uh, and, uh, at the time I, that time and the present time, I stay in this my country and I like.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I haven't visited other countries. I like my country very much because I was born here and I have lived here my whole life.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'don't visited' is incorrect; use present perfect 'haven't visited' to indicate experience up to now. 'Now when I was born' mixes tenses; 'I was born here' is simple past. 'I stay in this my country' should be 'I have lived here' or 'I live here.' Use 'my whole life' or 'since I was born' to express continuity. The corrected version uses appropriate past simple for birth and present perfect for life experience.