Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru olmalı. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra haftalık rutininizi ve hangi tür manzaraları çektiğinizi belirten bir veya iki destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve doğru fiil formlarını kullanın (ör. "go" yerine "go to", "taking photograph" yerine "take photographs"). Örnek yapı: 1) Konu cümlesi, 2) rutin ayrıntısı, 3) bir örnek manzara türü.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. It is one of my favorite activities and I usually go to interesting places every weekend to take photographs. For example, I often photograph coastal scenery and city skylines because I like contrasts between nature and buildings.

제안: Cevap açık fakat daha akıcı ve doğal olmalı; dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "bridge" → "bridges", "peoples" → "people"). Bir konu cümlesiyle tercih belirtin, ardından nedenlerinizi bağlaçlarla bağlayarak iki kısa destekleyici cümle verin. Gereksiz sesli dolguları ("uh") çıkarın.

예시: Generally, I prefer urban areas because I enjoy skyscrapers and bridges. Also, I like the energy of busy streets, as the crowds and shops create interesting photo opportunities.

제안: Cevap daha net ve mantıklı bir gerekçe içermeli; dilbilgisi ve kelime sıralaması düzeltilmeli. "Other countries" yerine "other countries' views" veya "views from other countries" kullanın; "seem to order me" ifadesi anlamsız, burada muhtemelen "seem ordinary to me" demek istemişsiniz. Konu cümlesiyle tercih belirtin, ardından nedeninizi açıkça açıklayın ve bir örnek ekleyin.

예시: I prefer views from other countries because scenes in my country often seem ordinary to me after seeing them so many times. For instance, I enjoy photographing landscapes abroad because they offer new architecture and unfamiliar natural features that inspire me.

× It is one of the my favorite activities and I go go for go to some interesting places to taking photograph for every weekend.

✓ It is one of my favorite activities, and I go to some interesting places to take photographs every weekend.

The phrase 'the my' uses an incorrect article+possessive combination; use 'my' only. Extra repeated words 'go go for go' are unnecessary and ungrammatical. The verb following 'to' should be in base form 'take' (infinitive), not 'taking'. Use 'photographs' (plural) to match 'places' and habitual action. Place commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, drop 'the' before 'my', use 'go to' + base verb and plural 'photographs'.

× Generally I prefer urban areas because I like the skyscrapers and bridge and maybe, uh, crowded peoples, uh, that's all.

✓ Generally I prefer urban areas because I like the skyscrapers and bridges and maybe, uh, crowded people, uh, that's all.

'Bridge' should be plural 'bridges' to match 'skyscrapers' and the general sense. 'Peoples' is incorrect when referring to groups of persons; use 'people' (plural irregular). Keep article usage consistent: 'the skyscrapers' is acceptable if referring to specific notable skyscrapers; otherwise omit 'the'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general preferences and the correct plural form 'people'.

× I prefer the other countries views because in my countries views are seem to order me because I generally see all of them.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because the views in my country seem boring to me since I generally see them all.

'The other countries views' incorrectly uses 'the' + plural possessive; use 'views in other countries' or 'views of other countries'. 'My countries views' should be 'my country' (singular possessive) or 'my country's views'. 'Are seem' is ungrammatical: use 'seem' (verb) not 'are seem'. 'Order me' is wrong word choice; likely 'bore me' or 'boring to me'. 'All of them' is awkward; 'them all' or 'all of them' but better 'them' here. Suggestion: restructure to 'I prefer views in other countries because the views in my country seem boring to me since I generally see them all.'