Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use a more natural, concise opening sentence, correct grammar and vocabulary errors, and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. Whenever I go out, I often take my phone out to capture interesting scenes, whether the light is perfect or not. For example, I sometimes find unusual compositions in a busy street or a quiet park, which makes photography enjoyable for me.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons and avoid vague or fragmented sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'well-maintained' instead of 'pristine' if appropriate). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because my city’s streets and parks are well-maintained and quite green. For example, the tree-lined avenues and clear sunsets in the city create interesting light and contrasts for photos, so I usually find better shots there.

제안: Answer directly and correct grammar (tense and article use). Give a brief reason and a specific example of what you hope to see abroad. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I’d love to photograph coastal villages and mountain towns abroad because they offer colours and architectural styles I don’t see at home.

× I am insanely obsessed taking pictures of different views.

✓ I am insanely obsessed with taking pictures of different views.

The verb 'obsessed' requires the preposition 'with' before a gerund; omitting 'with' is incorrect. Use 'obsessed with doing something' to show what someone is fixated on. Suggestion: Insert 'with' before the gerund: 'obsessed with taking'.

× Whenever I go outside I'm that person who pulls out, pulls out his phone just to take a picture.

✓ Whenever I go outside, I'm the person who pulls out his phone just to take a picture.

Redundant repetition 'pulls out, pulls out' is incorrect and 'that person' is less natural than 'the person' in this context. Keep the gerund phrase 'to take a picture' is fine. Suggestion: remove the duplicate and use 'the person who'.

× It doesn't matter if the fuse really good or bad, I will just try to make something good out of that.

✓ It doesn't matter if the view is really good or bad; I will just try to make something good out of it.

'fuse' is a misheard word and should be 'view'. The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'view' and uses 'that' awkwardly; 'it' is the correct pronoun referring to 'view'. Also punctuation: use semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: use 'view is' and 'out of it'.

× So I'm like that in real life and I'm really like taking pictures of the few.

✓ So I'm like that in real life and I really like taking pictures of the view.

'really like taking' is correct but the original has 'I'm really like' which mixes structures; 'the few' is a mispronunciation for 'the view'. Use 'I really like taking pictures of the view.' Suggestion: remove the extra 'I'm' and correct 'few' to 'view'.

× In my city, I would say urban areas because it's very green, everything is pristine.

✓ In my city, I would choose urban areas because it's very green and everything is pristine.

No major grammar error but 'say urban areas' is awkward; 'choose' fits the question better and connectives: use 'and' not comma splice. Suggestion: use 'choose' and join clauses properly.

× There are a lot of trees, the sun's clear.

✓ There are a lot of trees, and the sun is clear.

Comma splice joins two independent clauses incorrectly. Also contraction 'sun's' can be ambiguous; expanding to 'sun is' improves clarity. Suggestion: add 'and' or separate into two sentences.

× If it's like sunset, if it's like like it's, there's always something in the urban areas.

✓ If it's sunset, there's always something interesting in urban areas.

Repeated 'like' is filler and confusing; 'in the urban areas' can be simplified to 'in urban areas'. Place adjective 'interesting' to clarify 'something'. Suggestion: remove extra 'like' and streamline phrase.

× So I would rather with the.

✓ So I would rather be there.

The fragment lacks necessary components; 'would rather' requires a verb or clause (e.g., 'be there' or 'choose urban areas'). Suggestion: complete the comparison by adding a verb or phrase after 'would rather'.

× The fact that I have almost take pictures of every few in my city, specifically in my country, I would say outside the country, so I could experience different kind of views.

✓ The fact that I have almost taken pictures of every view in my city, and specifically in my country, makes me want to go outside the country so I can experience different kinds of views.

'have almost take' mixes present perfect with base form; it should be 'have almost taken' (past participle). 'few' should be 'view'. Also 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' and tense consistency: 'so I can' instead of 'so I could' for present intention. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have taken', correct nouns and pluralize 'kinds'.

× So why not, yeah.

✓ So why not, yeah.

This phrase is conversational; no grammatical correction required. If formal, use 'So why not?' but as an utterance it's acceptable.