Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сфокусируйтесь на чёткой теме предложения и используйте связные, грамматически правильные фразы. Уберите повторы и исправьте ошибки времени и структуры. Добавьте одно понятное объясняющее предложение с конкретикой (например, что именно вам нравится — закаты, архитектура или пейзажи), используйте связки (because, so, when) и не более 3–4 предложений.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views when I travel. I especially enjoy capturing sunsets and city skylines because the light and colours change so dramatically. When I find a beautiful spot I usually take several shots from different angles to get the best composition.

제안: Выражайте предпочтение прямо, затем поясните причину с конкретными деталями и свяжите мысли при помощи вводных слов (however, because, while). Избегайте лишних звуков (uh) и грамматических ошибок (например, 'rural areas' вместо 'rural IRS'). Стремитесь к ясным сравнениям и 2–3 предложениям в ответе.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban areas are interesting because of the architecture and lively streets, while rural areas appeal to me because of the peaceful mountains and green landscapes. However, if I must choose, I usually prefer rural views for relaxation.

제안: Отвечайте кратко и структурированно: сначала тема, затем причина с конкретными примерами. Исправьте языковые ошибки ('take photos', 'both of them') и избегайте повторов. Добавьте одно или два конкретных примера мест, которые вам нравятся, чтобы показать детализацию.

예시: I enjoy taking photos both in my own country and abroad. At home I like photographing historic towns and coastal scenes because they are familiar and meaningful, while abroad I enjoy capturing new cultures and landscapes for variety and inspiration.

× I especially in in my travel.

✓ I especially do this when I travel.

The original sentence omits the main verb and has a duplicated word 'in'. You need a verb to show the action (do this) and a clear time phrase (when I travel). Suggestion: include a verb and correct prepositional phrase. (Original instructions required explanation in English; provided here.)

× Placed in the good and good place and there is great view.

✓ When I am in a good place, there is a great view.

The original lacks a clear subject and verb and misuses adjectives and articles ('good and good place' is awkward). Use a clause with subject 'I' or passive 'I am' and an article 'a' before 'great view' if needed. Suggestion: form a complete clause and use articles correctly.

× I will take a photo.

✓ I will take a photo.

This sentence is grammatically correct for expressing a future intention, so no change is needed. Keep using 'will' for a spontaneous decision or future action.

× I, I prefer both of that views.

✓ I prefer both of those views.

The phrase 'that views' mixes a singular demonstrative 'that' with plural 'views'. Use the plural demonstrative 'those' with plural noun. Also remove the repeated 'I'.

× Urban is, uh, more construction and, uh, interaction and so cool.

✓ Urban areas have more buildings and interactions and are very cool.

The noun 'urban' needs to be 'urban areas' and you must use appropriate nouns ('buildings' or 'construction') and the verb 'have' to describe characteristics. Use 'are' to link to the adjective 'very cool'.

× But rural IRS do so good because I can see a lot of mountains green place and it's still so cool.

✓ But rural areas are great because I can see many mountains and green places, and it's still very cool.

Several problems: 'IRS' is incorrect—should be 'areas'; 'do so good' is ungrammatical—use 'are great' or 'are very nice'; 'a lot of mountains green place' lacks conjunctions and proper noun forms—use 'many mountains and green places'. Also use 'very' instead of 'so' for formal clarity.

× I I prefer to take you in both of them because I so much like my country and I have a lot of photos from my country, another place, my country so big and a lot I have a lot of place where where I've been and other country too.

✓ I prefer to take photos in both because I like my country very much, and I have a lot of photos from it; my country is so big and there are many places where I've been, and other countries too.

This long sentence has many issues: repeated words ('I I'), wrong pronoun 'you' instead of 'photos', incorrect word order, missing articles, and run-on structure. Use 'prefer to take photos', 'like my country very much', 'have a lot of photos from it', and break into clauses with proper articles and prepositions. Use present perfect 'I've been' for experiences.

× So good for doing a view.

✓ It's great for sightseeing.

The phrase 'doing a view' is unidiomatic. Use 'sightseeing' or 'taking photos of views' and include a subject and verb: 'It's great for sightseeing.'