Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: First, make your response more fluent and correct grammar and pronunciation errors. Start with a clear topic sentence such as “Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.” Then briefly explain frequency and a specific example. Use linking words (for example, when I travel) and avoid repetitions or filler words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (landscapes, sunsets, mountains).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I don't take photos often in my daily life, but when I travel I always photograph landscapes that catch my eye. For example, my phone is full of shots of mountains and sunrises because I love capturing natural light and colours.

제안: Reduce hesitations and false starts; answer directly with a topic sentence and then give one clear specific reason and an example. Use linking words like because and for example to make it coherent. Correct tense and verb forms (e.g., “I prefer rural areas” and “I can't remember the last time I took a photo of an urban area”). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating words.

예시: I definitely prefer views in rural areas because I find nature more relaxing and photogenic. For example, when I visited Lake Kovada in Sapara, I stopped the car to admire and photograph the peaceful waters and surrounding forests. I rarely take photos of urban scenes because they feel too busy for the kind of pictures I like.

제안: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then compare with brief supporting details using linking words (for example, on the one hand/ on the other hand). Correct unclear phrases and aim for precise vocabulary (coastline, mountain ranges, scenery). Avoid sentence fragments and filler words.

예시: I prefer views in my own country, although I also enjoy scenery abroad. On the one hand, our western coastline offers many shades of blue and beautiful beaches; on the other hand, the eastern mountain ranges are spectacular. Still, I would like to visit other countries to see different landscapes, but my country remains my favourite.

× I learn rarely taking take photos in my daily life.

✓ I rarely take photos in my daily life.

The sentence uses incorrect verb 'learn' and the phrase 'taking take' is redundant. This is a present tense statement about habitual action, so use the simple present 'I rarely take photos'. Remove extra words and place adverb 'rarely' before the main verb for correct adverb placement.

× Yet when I travel I can't help taking pictures of landscapes that excite me.

✓ Yet when I travel I can't help taking pictures of landscapes that excite me.

This sentence is already correct: after 'can't help' the gerund form 'taking' is required. No correction needed.

× For example, on my phone you can find shots such as mountains, sunrises and anything. To do with nature.

✓ For example, on my phone you can find shots of mountains, sunrises and other natural scenes.

The fragment 'To do with nature' is not a complete clause and 'anything' is vague. Rephrase to a complete noun phrase 'other natural scenes'. Use 'shots of' not 'shots such as' followed by parallel nouns.

× Tamannaah.

✓ (Remove or clarify as it is unclear; possibly say 'Those are my favourites.')

A single name 'Tamannaah' is fragmentary and unclear in context. Either remove it or explain its relevance with a complete sentence.

× Watch the college.

✓ (Unclear phrase; likely meant 'Honestly' or 'To be honest'.)

'Watch the college' does not fit context and appears to be mis-transcribed. Replace with a coherent phrase that fits the meaning; if speaker meant to emphasize, use 'To be honest' or similar.

× I definitely prefer views in rural rural areas.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas.

Duplicate word 'rural' should be removed. 'Prefer' is correctly in simple present to express a general preference.

× To be honest I can't remember the last time I take UH. And photo of an urban area.

✓ To be honest, I can't remember the last time I took a photo of an urban area.

After 'the last time' the past tense is required ('took'). The original uses present 'take' which is incorrect. Also remove filler 'UH' and join fragments into one sentence.

× Nevertheless, whenever I travel through a rural area, I stop for a minute and watch the view that nature presents me.

✓ Nevertheless, whenever I travel through a rural area, I stop for a minute and admire the view that nature presents to me.

'Watch the view that nature presents me' is awkward. Use 'admire the view' and include the preposition 'to' in 'presents to me' for idiomatic expression.

× Uh, for example, uh, the first time I went to a lake called Kovada in Sparta, I stopped my vehicle and watched the.

✓ For example, the first time I went to a lake called Kovada in Sparta, I stopped my vehicle and watched the view.

Remove filler 'uh' and complete the sentence by specifying 'the view'. Ending with 'watched the.' is incomplete; provide the object to complete the sentence.

× Make no mistake, my country offers me numerous charming views.

✓ Make no mistake: my country offers many charming views.

'Numerous charming views' is acceptable but 'offers me' is odd; better is 'offers many charming views'. Using a colon after 'Make no mistake' improves structure. 'Many' is a more natural quantifier here.

× For example, it has serious all with all shades of blue on the western coast.

✓ For example, its western coast has seas with all shades of blue.

Original has word order and word choice errors: 'serious all' is incorrect; likely intended 'seas' or 'shore'. Use possessive 'its western coast' and correct noun 'seas' and phrase 'all shades of blue'.

× On the other hand, it has enormous mountains in the eastern region.

✓ On the other hand, it has enormous mountains in the eastern region.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses simple present to describe a general fact. No change needed.

× Yet there are charming sceneries in other countries as well, so I. To see them either, but my country comes first in the in that case. OK.

✓ Yet there are charming landscapes in other countries as well, so I would like to see them too, but my country comes first in that case.

'Sceneries' is uncountable/awkward; use 'landscapes' or 'scenic places'. The sentence fragments and punctuation are incorrect. Use 'would like to see them too' to express willingness and 'in that case' to finish the thought. Remove extraneous 'OK'.