Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and filler words (e.g., "uh"); start with a clear topic sentence and add one specific example. Use one linking phrase to connect ideas (e.g., "because" or "so"). Keep answers concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because they preserve memories of special days. For example, last month I photographed the sunset at a lakeside park, and the photo helps me remember the colors and the calm atmosphere.

제안: Correct grammar and avoid repetition; replace vague phrases with specific descriptions. Use a linking word to add supporting detail (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and remove fillers like "uh". Also fix unclear phrases (e.g., "keep scare staring") and use idiomatic expressions accurately.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and scenic. For example, in my village during the festive season the rolling hills, colorful decorations and traditional houses look like a painting and I can spend hours admiring them.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition; use a clear topic sentence and one concrete example. Replace vague terms like "world views" and "vast scenario views" with precise descriptions (e.g., "diverse landscapes"). Remove filler words and link sentences with words like "because" or "for example."

예시: I prefer the views in my country because it offers diverse landscapes, from mountains to beaches. For example, I recently visited a coastal town where the cliffs and turquoise sea made a memorable scene.

× Yes, I definitely do like uh, taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I definitely like taking pictures of different views.

The phrase 'do like taking' is grammatically acceptable but the auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for a simple affirmative present tense and sounds informal or redundant. Remove 'do' for a natural, grammatically correct response: 'I definitely like taking...'. Suggestion: Use 'do' only for emphasis or in negatives/questions; here simple present is preferred.

× Uh, I feel like it gives us a memory for that day and also I would love to look back at that picture.

✓ Uh, I feel like it gives me a memory of that day and also I would love to look back at those pictures.

The speaker shifts from plural 'us' to singular perspective; use 'me' to match the speaker. 'A memory for that day' is unnatural; use 'a memory of that day'. Also 'that picture' conflicts with plural 'pictures' earlier; use 'those pictures' to be consistent. Suggestion: keep pronouns and number consistent with the speaker and reference (me/me, that/those).

× I definitely prefer the views in the rural areas.

✓ I definitely prefer the views in rural areas.

The definite article 'the' before 'rural areas' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Use the plural noun without 'the' to express a general preference: 'in rural areas.' Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to categories in general.

× Whenever I visit my UMM village during festive season, I feel like it has the best view, best scenery ever.

✓ Whenever I visit my village during the festive season, I feel like it has the best scenery ever.

'UMM' seems extraneous unless it's a proper name; if not, remove it. 'Festive season' needs the definite article 'the' in English. Repeating 'best view, best scenery' is redundant; use one phrase 'best scenery.' Suggestion: use 'the festive season' and avoid redundant adjectives.

× Uh, where you can just uh, keep scare staring into it and it just looks like it just came out of a picture painting.

✓ ...where you can just keep staring at it, and it looks like it just came out of a painting.

'Keep scare staring' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'keep staring' (present participle) or 'can't stop staring.' Use 'staring at it' (correct preposition) and 'came out of a painting' is the idiomatic phrase. Remove the extra 'just' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'keep staring at' or 'can't stop staring' and 'came out of a painting.'

× Well, I haven't been to other countries yet, but uh, I definitely do love the world views my country offers.

✓ Well, I haven't been to other countries yet, but I definitely love the views my country offers.

'Do love' is unnecessary in affirmative present tense; use 'definitely love.' Also 'world views' is ambiguous; 'views my country offers' is clearer. Suggestion: use simple present form for habitual or general statements.

× I feel like my country has vast scenario views, uh, which I am actually proud of.

✓ I feel like my country has vast scenic views, which I am proud of.

'Scenario views' is incorrect collocation; the correct adjective is 'scenic' to describe views. 'Actually' is unnecessary and weakens the sentence. Suggestion: use 'scenic' to describe landscapes and remove filler adverbs unless needed for emphasis.

× So I did have the opportunity to visit different places and I definitely do love the views of my country.

✓ So I had the opportunity to visit different places, and I definitely love the views of my country.

'Did have' is an emphatic past tense but unnecessary here; use simple past 'had.' Also 'do love' is redundant in present; use 'definitely love.' Suggestion: use simple past for completed actions and simple present for general feelings.