Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail or example. Use linking words for coherence. Correct errors like "with the mountain" → "of mountains" and "it's really nice places" → "they're really beautiful".

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially mountain scenery. For example, when I visit a national park I like to photograph the ridgelines at sunrise because the light makes the peaks look dramatic.

제안: Clarify your preference and correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct statement (I prefer rural views), then give two coherent supporting reasons linked with connectors (because, for example). Fix phrases like "real gifts" → "rural areas", "looking at fields without and hills" → "looking at fields and hills" and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of nature, which helps me relax after a busy week. For example, I like traveling to the countryside to walk among fields and low hills, and sometimes I also enjoy city views when I visit museums or cafés.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and organize reasons with linking words. Correct grammar: "I love travel other country" → "I love traveling to other countries". Avoid repeating words like "learn" and use specific examples of what you want to experience (food, architecture, festivals).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I dream of visiting Japan to see cherry blossoms and traditional temples, which would teach me about local customs and architecture.

× I enjoy taking pictures with the beautiful scenery with the mountain.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of the beautiful scenery in the mountains.

The definite article 'the' was incorrectly used before 'mountain' and 'with' is the wrong preposition. Use 'of' for taking pictures of something and 'in the mountains' to refer to mountainous scenery. Also plural 'mountains' is more natural for general scenery.

× I enjoy it because it's really nice places.

✓ I enjoy it because they are really nice places.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'places'. Replace 'it' with 'they' to match plural, and maintain 'really' as an adverb modifying the adjective 'nice'.

× Well, for me I prefer real gifts because they are peaceful and full of nature and help me to relax after busy days.

✓ Well, for me I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful, full of nature, and help me relax after busy days.

'Real gifts' is likely a misuse; 'rural areas' fits the context. Use commas to separate adjectives and clauses, and 'help me relax' is more natural than 'help me to relax' though both are possible. Also 'full of nature' is acceptable but 'full of nature' is fine; maintain parallel structure.

× For example, I like to travel in countryside and looking at fields without and hills.

✓ For example, I like to travel in the countryside and look at fields and hills.

Use consistent verb forms: 'like to travel' should be followed by the base form 'look' not 'looking'. Also include the article 'the' before 'countryside' and fix 'without' which seems erroneous; use 'and' to list 'fields and hills'.

× But sometime, sometimes I also enjoy visiting views when I visit.

✓ But sometimes I also enjoy visiting scenic places when I travel.

Use plural 'sometimes' for adverb of frequency. 'Visiting views' is awkward; 'visiting scenic places' is clearer. Replace the second 'visit' with 'travel' to avoid repetition and to make the meaning clear. Maintain present simple tense for habitual actions.

× Honestly I love travel other country because that's my dream and.

✓ Honestly, I love to travel to other countries because that's my dream.

Use the infinitive 'to travel' and add the preposition 'to' before 'other countries'. Plural 'countries' is more natural. Add a comma after 'Honestly' for clarity and remove the trailing 'and'.

× I want to learn and learn culture and beliefs and.

✓ I want to learn about their culture and beliefs.

Avoid repeating 'learn' and use 'learn about' to indicate learning topics. Remove the trailing conjunction 'and'. This keeps the sentence concise and grammatically correct in present simple intent.

× Gain more experience and travel and appreciate their places.

✓ I want to gain more experience, travel, and appreciate their places.

This fragment lacks a subject; include 'I want to' to match previous sentence. Use commas to separate items in the intended list and keep verbs in parallel base form: 'gain', 'travel', 'appreciate'.