Typing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, avoid fillers (umm, MMM), and structure your answer: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific reasons with brief supporting details, and a final short comment. Use linking words (because, and) and precise vocabulary (calming, aesthetic) to sound more natural.

예시: I prefer handwriting because it feels more calming and helps me concentrate. For example, when I write in a notebook I enjoy the quiet atmosphere and the tactile feeling of the pen, which makes ideas flow better. Also, my handwriting is neat, so I take pleasure in how the finished page looks.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a short supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating words (usually, usually) and improve grammar (use articles and comparative phrasing correctly).

예시: I usually type on a desktop computer. My company provides a desktop, and I find its full-size keyboard faster and more comfortable for long work sessions, so I prefer it to a laptop.

제안: Give a direct time reference in the topic sentence, then explain briefly what happened. Avoid vague phrases like "from my memory" and correct word choice (learned to type, not play). Use a linking word to connect the time and explanation.

예시: I learned to type when I was in junior high school. At that time we had a computer course where the teacher showed us proper finger placement and we practised typing exercises every week.

제안: Produce a complete, specific answer: state what you do, how often, and give an example of a method or tool. Remove fillers and finish your sentence. Use linking words to show frequency and purpose.

예시: To improve my typing speed, I practise for at least 20 minutes every day using online typing tests and drills. For example, I use a typing website to work on accuracy first and then gradually increase my speed.

× MMM I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the umm, atmosphere and the peaceful moment it gives.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the atmosphere and the peaceful moments it gives me.

The original sentence misuses 'the peaceful moment it gives' and omits a pronoun for the recipient. Use plural 'moments' for general experience (singular/plural issue) and add 'me' to show who receives the peaceful moments (pronoun correctness). Also remove filler words 'MMM' and 'umm' for clarity.

× My handwriting is also beautiful so that I enjoy.

✓ My handwriting is also beautiful, so I enjoy writing by hand.

'So that I enjoy' is an incorrect conjunctional structure. Use 'so' plus a main clause: 'so I enjoy...' and specify 'writing by hand' to make the meaning clear. Added a comma before 'so' for correct clause connection.

× Nowadays I usually type on a desktop because it is faster than a laptop usually and my company gives me that.

✓ Nowadays I usually type on a desktop because it is faster than a laptop, and my company provides one for me.

Placement of 'usually' was awkward and 'gives me that' is informal and unclear. Use 'provides one for me' to clarify. Maintain present tense 'is faster' for general truth. Added comma before coordinating conjunction.

× From my memory, I learned how to type on a keyboard.

✓ If I remember correctly, I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in junior high school.

'From my memory' is non-idiomatic; 'If I remember correctly' or 'As far as I remember' are idiomatic. Also combine this sentence with the time clause for clarity and natural flow.

× When I was at junior high school, there was a computer lesson that taught you how to play.

✓ When I was in junior high school, we had a computer class that taught us how to use a keyboard.

Use 'in' with 'junior high school' and replace 'there was a computer lesson that taught you' with active, first-person plural 'we had a computer class that taught us' to match the speaker's perspective. 'Play' is incorrect verb choice here; use 'use a keyboard' or 'type' for intended meaning.

× Umm. To improve my typing speed, I usually practice typing every day for about uh. At least.

✓ To improve my typing speed, I usually practice typing every day for at least thirty minutes.

The original contains fillers and an incomplete time phrase 'for about uh. At least.' Provide a complete adverbial phrase to make the sentence grammatical and clear. The gerund 'typing' after 'practice' is correct; the issue was incompleteness and filler words.