Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời có cố gắng đưa ra lý do và ví dụ, nhưng ý tưởng chưa rõ và bị lạc đề ở phần nhựa thải. Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng cấu trúc “Yes, I often ride a bicycle…”, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như “have fun driving/riding”, “I have will be affected” và “I studying”. Nên dùng từ “reduce carbon emissions” thay cho cách diễn đạt dài và không tự nhiên về “carbon footprint surround us”. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời theo thứ tự: tần suất → lý do → ví dụ cụ thể; đồng thời giữ trong khoảng 3–4 câu.

예시: Yes, I often ride a bicycle, especially when I go to school. I usually cycle with my friends because it is enjoyable and helps reduce carbon emissions. I have been doing this for about four years, and it is also a good way to stay fit.

제안: Bạn đã trả lời đúng chủ đề và có lý do cùng ví dụ thời gian, nhưng “electrical bike” nên sửa thành “electric bike”, còn “my own transport” không phù hợp vì xe đạp điện cũng là phương tiện của bạn. Cần sửa “I won’t worry about I am late” thành “I don’t have to worry about being late” và “it only take” thành “it only takes”. Câu cuối bị lặp ý và dùng từ chưa tự nhiên; “electric motorbike” là cách nói phù hợp hơn. Nên nêu rõ phương tiện thường dùng trước, sau đó giải thích tính tiện lợi và đưa ví dụ cụ thể.

예시: I usually travel by electric bike because it is convenient and efficient. I do not have to worry about being late, as it takes only ten minutes to get to school. In the future, I would also like to try travelling by electric motorbike.

제안: Ý chính phù hợp và có ví dụ, nhưng cần sửa “refer” thành “prefer”, “can setting” thành “can see”, “the the” thành “the”, và “special memory” thành “special memories”. Cụm “a lot of stuff” quá chung chung; nên dùng “beautiful scenery” hoặc mô tả cảnh cụ thể. Phần nói về mẹ chưa liên kết rõ với câu hỏi, nên giải thích rằng bạn muốn mẹ cũng được ngắm cảnh để cảm thấy thoải mái hơn. Hãy dùng cấu trúc “I prefer… because… For example…” để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, I usually choose a window seat on a plane so that I can see the clouds and the landscape below. I would also like my mother to try it because she often feels tired when travelling by bus or plane.

제안: Bạn đã trả lời “Yes” và nêu địa điểm, độ tuổi, cảm xúc, nhưng “special teams” có lẽ muốn nói “special memories” hoặc “a memorable trip”. Cần dùng quá khứ nhất quán: “It was fun” và “I felt happy”; đồng thời sửa “warmly atmosphere” thành “a warm atmosphere”. Nên bổ sung một hoạt động cụ thể trong chuyến đi ở Dallas để phần mô tả rõ hơn, chẳng hạn tham quan địa điểm nào hoặc dành thời gian làm gì cùng gia đình. Câu cuối về bạn bè không cần thiết nếu không được liên kết; hãy kết thúc bằng cảm nhận về chuyến đi.

예시: Yes, I went on a memorable trip to Dallas with my family when I was ten. It was a long journey, but I enjoyed spending time with them and visiting new places. I especially remember the warm atmosphere in the family, so the trip still brings back happy memories.

× Yes, I have fun drive a bicycle to reach our environment and I have will be affected previously if it has large amount of carbon footprint surround us.

✓ Yes, I have fun riding a bicycle to help protect the environment, and I have been concerned about the large amount of carbon emissions surrounding us.

After have fun, use a gerund: riding, not drive. The phrase the environment requires the definite article. Have will be affected is not a correct verb form; have been concerned correctly expresses an ongoing concern. Surrounding is the present participle modifying emissions.

× Example, I usually go to school by bike with my friends during four years, I studying at the middle school one year, then I have a plan to encourage local people decline using plastic waste.

✓ For example, I usually go to school by bike with my friends, and I have done so for four years. I have been studying at middle school for one year, and I have a plan to encourage local people to stop using plastic.

Use for, not during, with a period of time. The phrase I studying is missing an auxiliary verb; have been studying expresses an activity continuing until now. Use to stop or to avoid before the next verb. The original text is a comma splice, so it should be divided into properly connected sentences.

× Now I'm often travelling by electrical bike because it has a higher efficiency than my own transport, so I won't worry about I am late.

✓ Now I often travel by electric bike because it is more efficient than my usual mode of transport, so I do not worry about being late.

Electric is the correct adjective, not electrical, for this type of bike. Compare efficiency or, more naturally, use the adjective efficient: more efficient than my usual mode of transport. After worry about, use the gerund being, not the clause I am.

× For instance, it only take 10 minutes to the school.

✓ For instance, it only takes 10 minutes to get to school.

The subject it is third-person singular, so take changes to takes. Use the phrase get to school. School normally does not need the definite article when referring to the institution generally.

× And in the future I want to try to travel by motor by electrical motorbike.

✓ In the future, I want to try travelling by electric motorbike.

After try, use a gerund when describing an activity to experience: try travelling. The repeated and incorrect prepositions by motor by should be replaced with the natural phrase by electric motorbike. The sentence also needs a clearer structure.

× I refer to sit by the window traveling because it makes me feel more excited when I can setting the spectacular views.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because it makes me feel more excited when I can see the spectacular views.

After the modal can, use the base form see, not setting. The phrase the spectacular views uses the article the because the views are specific. Prefer to sit is the correct verb pattern for expressing a preference.

× For example, I usually sit by the the airplane window.

✓ For example, I usually sit by the airplane window.

The definite article the is repeated. Use it only once before airplane window.

× It creates special memory when I am seeing a lot of stuff.

✓ It creates special memories when I see many interesting things.

Use the plural form memories because the experience creates more than one memory in general. The simple present see is more appropriate for a habitual experience than am seeing. The phrase many interesting things is more natural and grammatically complete than a lot of stuff in this context.

× Beautiful things I hope my mom can try.

✓ I hope my mom can experience these beautiful things too.

The original sentence has an unclear word order and does not form a complete grammatical structure. A complete sentence needs a subject and a properly organized verb phrase: I hope my mom can experience.

× Like me, she always feel tired when she's in the bus or plane.

✓ Like me, she always feels tired when she is on a bus or a plane.

She is third-person singular, so feel changes to feels. Use on a bus and on a plane for travel. The indefinite article a is used when referring to a bus or plane in general.

× Yes, I had special teams with my family during the journey in Dallas when I was 10.

✓ Yes, I had special times with my family during a journey in Dallas when I was 10.

The article a is needed before the singular countable noun journey because this is not a previously specified journey. Teams is not the appropriate plural noun for experiences with family; times is the grammatically suitable noun here.

× For instance, I felt I was very happy when I joined warmly atmosphere with family.

✓ For instance, I felt very happy when I experienced a warm atmosphere with my family.

Warm is the adjective needed before atmosphere; warmly is an adverb. Use a before the singular countable noun atmosphere. The natural preposition is with my family, and experienced is the appropriate verb for an atmosphere.

× I hope I will have the other experience with my friends.

✓ I hope I will have another experience with my friends.

Use another before a singular countable noun when meaning one more experience. The phrase the other refers to a specific alternative or previously mentioned experience, so it is not appropriate here.