Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接，能够说明不常骑自行车的原因，但有冠词、搭配和连接词问题。应说“ride a bicycle”，而不是“ride bicycle”；“my balancing is bad”不自然，建议改为“I have poor balance”。此外，“'cause”和“thus”同时使用略显生硬，口语中可以用“because”或“so”连接。可以补充一个具体结果，例如平时选择步行或乘坐公共交通，但总长度控制在2—3句。

예시: No, I hardly ever ride a bicycle because I have poor balance. I usually walk or take the bus instead, as I feel much safer that way.

제안: 回答内容完整，涵盖了长途和当地交通方式，也给出了原因。但句子过长，信息层次不够清晰；应使用“take a flight to another country”和“use the local metro”这类更自然的表达。“arrive at that country”应改为“arrive in that country”。建议拆成两句，并用“Once I arrive...”清楚地衔接旅行前后；“almost use metro to reach every place”可改为“the metro can take me to most places”。

예시: When I travel abroad, I usually take a flight to another country. Once I arrive, I normally use the local metro because it is convenient and can take me to most places.

제안: 回答观点明确，也说明了喜欢靠窗座位的原因，但存在明显重复和语法问题，例如“so”重复使用、“I'll often I'll always”重复，以及“the view of the nature”不自然。建议用“enjoy nature”或“admire the scenery”表达，并将“taking transfer”改为“taking public transport”或直接说“travelling”。可以补充一个具体场景，例如在飞机上看云或风景，使答案更生动。

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery while I travel. For example, on a plane, I like watching the clouds and the landscape below.

제안: 回答基本回应了问题，但时态、数量和词语搭配错误较多。“many time”应改为“many times”；讲童年经历时应使用一般过去时，如“travelled”；“I wasn't considered as a long journey”主语错误，应改为“they weren't really long journeys”。“travel at other country”应改为“travel to other countries”，并可具体说明通常是短途旅行还是去附近城市。

예시: I travelled with my family many times when I was a child, but the trips were usually quite short. My parents had busy jobs, so we mostly visited nearby cities rather than travelling abroad for a long time.

× No, I barely ride bicycle 'cause my balancing is bad, thus I can't ride bicycle very well.

✓ No, I barely ride a bicycle 'cause my balancing is bad, thus I can't ride a bicycle very well.

可数名词 bicycle 表示“一辆自行车”时，前面需要使用不定冠词 a。第二次出现 bicycle 时也需要保留 a。建议注意：单数可数名词通常不能单独使用。

× Mostly I take a flight to arrive to other country and when I arrive at that country I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use metro to reach every place.

✓ Mostly I take a flight to arrive in another country, and when I arrive in that country, I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use the metro to reach every place.

表示“到达某个国家”时，arrive 后面通常使用介词 in，而不是 to 或 at。arrive at 通常用于较小的地点，例如 arrive at the station。建议记忆：arrive in + 大地点，arrive at + 小地点。

× Mostly I take a flight to arrive to other country and when I arrive at that country I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use metro to reach every place.

✓ Mostly I take a flight to arrive in another country, and when I arrive in that country, I'll use the local metro to travel around 'cause I think it's very convenient and you can almost use the metro to reach every place.

country 是单数可数名词，前面不能直接使用 other，需要使用 another，或者说 another country。metro 在这里指当地的地铁系统，是特指概念，因此使用 the metro。建议区分：another + 单数可数名词，other + 复数名词或不可数名词。

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

because 和 so 都可以表示因果关系，但通常不能在同一个原因结构中重复使用。可以使用“because..., ...”或“..., so...”，不能使用“because..., so...”。建议选择一个连词表达原因和结果。

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

nature 表示自然这一抽象概念时，通常不使用 the。transfer 在这里作为单数可数名词使用，前面需要加 a。建议判断名词是可数还是不可数，并注意单数可数名词前必须有冠词或其他限定词。

× Yes, because I'm a nature person so I like to see the view of the nature so I'll often I'll always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking transfer.

✓ Yes, because I'm a nature person, I like to see views of nature, so I always choose to sit by the window when I'm travelling and taking a transfer.

I'll often I'll always 中重复使用了两个主语和助动词，句子结构不完整且不自然。这里表达的是经常性的习惯，直接使用一般现在时 I always choose 更合适。建议检查句子中是否重复出现主语、助动词或相同成分。

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

many 后面必须接可数名词复数，因此应使用 many times，而不是 many time。other 后面表示多个国家时使用复数 countries。建议记忆：many + 可数名词复数。

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

when I was a child 明确表示过去时间，因此主句应使用一般过去时 traveled，而不是现在完成时 have traveled。过去发生的 have jobs 和 can't travel 也应分别改为 had jobs 和 couldn't travel。建议看到明确的过去时间标志时，优先使用一般过去时。

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

表示“去其他国家旅行”时，应使用 travel to，而不是 travel at。表示持续一段时间时，应使用 for a very long time，而不是 in a very long time。建议记忆：travel to + 地点，for + 一段持续时间。

× I have traveled with my family many time when I was a child but I wasn't considered as a long journey 'cause they'll have jobs so we can't travel at other country in a very long time.

✓ I traveled with my family many times when I was a child, but it wasn't considered a long journey 'cause they had jobs, so we couldn't travel to other countries for a very long time.

原句中 I wasn't considered as a long journey 的主语 I 不能被认为是“一次长途旅行”，主语和被动结构不匹配。应使用 it 指代这次旅行，并说 it wasn't considered a long journey。同时，consider 后面直接接宾语，不需要 as。建议使用被动语态时，确认主语确实是动作的承受者，并检查主语和补语是否逻辑一致。