Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly with a natural phrase such as “Absolutely” instead of “A big yes to this man.” Use specific and grammatically accurate vocabulary: “rivers and mountains” is more natural than “Riverside.” Also, the final sentence about talking with your family does not clearly support your preference for a window seat. Explain that the view makes the journey more enjoyable, and use a linking word such as “Moreover” if adding another reason.

예시: Absolutely. I prefer sitting by the window because I can enjoy the scenery, such as rivers, mountains, and small towns along the way. Moreover, watching the view makes long journeys feel more relaxing and enjoyable.

제안: Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to childhood: say “Yes, I had” rather than “I have.” Correct the articles and phrasing in “a best memory” and “a opportunity”; say “one of my best childhood memories” and “an opportunity.” Avoid the incomplete phrase “Cracking the joke” and connect your ideas clearly. Give one specific detail about the journey, such as where you went or what you did with your family.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was about ten, my family took a long road trip to the mountains, and it lasted nearly eight hours. It is one of my best childhood memories because I had plenty of time to talk and joke with my parents. I also enjoyed looking at the beautiful landscape along the way.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family as a child.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed time in the past, so the past tense had is required instead of the present perfect form have. Adding when I was a child also makes the time reference more natural.

× It is a best memory of my childhood because the journey gave me a opportunity to talk with my parents.

✓ It is one of the best memories of my childhood because the journey gave me an opportunity to talk with my parents.

Best is a superlative adjective and normally requires the definite article the. Since the sentence refers to one memory among several good memories, one of the best memories is the natural expression. The noun opportunity begins with a vowel sound, so it must be preceded by an, not a.

× Cracking the joke, uh, seeing the views and the mountain area and also the landscape.

✓ We cracked jokes, saw the mountain views, and enjoyed the landscape.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a complete subject and finite verb. Use the subject we with past-tense verbs such as cracked, saw, and enjoyed to form a complete sentence. Also, crack jokes is the natural expression rather than crack the joke in this context.