Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ по сути дан, но начало звучит неестественно, а фраза «when I travel in» грамматически незавершена. Сформулируйте прямой topic sentence: «Yes, I prefer sitting by the window». Затем добавьте конкретную причину и результат, используя связку «because» или «so». Следует избегать пауз «uh/umm», повторов и неестественного выражения «opportunity to see something new is important part of my journey»; лучше сказать «I enjoy looking at the scenery» или «It makes the journey more enjoyable».

예시: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. I can watch the landscape change and take photos along the way, so the journey feels more enjoyable and less tiring.

제안: Основной ответ понятен, но для вопроса о прошлом нужно использовать «Yes, I did» или «Yes, we did», а не «Yes, I have». Для более естественной речи замените «me and my family» на «my family and I», а «It was really nice days» на «It was a really nice trip». Завершите ответ ясным описанием поездки: укажите продолжительность или транспорт, а также конкретные занятия. Избегайте многочисленных пауз и незаконченной фразы «some with some bathing»; используйте связки «During the trip» и «Although».

예시: Yes, I did. About ten years ago, my family and I travelled to Sochi for a week by train. We spent most of our time swimming in the sea and relaxing on the beach. It was a memorable trip because we rarely had so much time together.

× Opportunity to see something new is important part of my journey.

✓ The opportunity to see something new is an important part of my journey.

The singular countable noun opportunity needs the definite article the because it refers to a specific opportunity. The noun part also needs the indefinite article an because it is singular and countable.

× so sit by the window when I travel in.

✓ so I sit by the window when I travel.

The clause needs the subject I. Also, travel is used without in when referring generally to travelling.

× when I travel in.

✓ when I travel.

The preposition in is unnecessary here. We normally say travel or travel by plane, train, or car, depending on the intended meaning.

× Yes, I have and it was around 10 years ago.

✓ Yes, I did, and it was around 10 years ago.

The question begins with Did you have, so the short answer should use did, not have. The past simple is required because the journey happened around ten years ago.

× me and my family went to Sochi.

✓ My family and I went to Sochi.

When the pronoun is part of the subject, use the subject pronoun I. In standard English, place the other subject before I: My family and I.

× It was really nice days.

✓ It was a really nice day.

The singular subject it must refer to a singular noun phrase, so day should be singular. Because day is a singular countable noun, it also needs the article a.

× we spent together some with some bathing.

✓ We spent some time together swimming and relaxing by the sea.

The original word order is incomplete and unclear. The natural structure is spend some time together followed by an activity, such as swimming and relaxing by the sea.