Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法と語法に多くの誤りがあります。例えば、「when I traveling」は「when I travel」、「enjoy to see」は「enjoy seeing」、「I do not like go」は「I do not like going」と言います。また、「window window」の重複を避け、「the bullet train」ではなく、一般的な移動について話すなら「on a train」とする方が自然です。最初に好みを明確に述べ、その後に「because」や「also」を使って理由を一つか二つ具体的に説明しましょう。なお、「座っていて退屈しない」という意味なら、景色を楽しめるため「I do not get bored」と表現できます。

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery outside. It is especially beautiful when I take a bullet train through the countryside. Also, looking out of the window helps me relax during a long journey.

제안: 内容は質問に直接答えており、年齢、目的、活動も含まれているため良いです。ただし、「a Osaka prefecture」は「Osaka Prefecture」または「Osaka」、「because to celebrate」は「to celebrate」、「That is for my first time」は「It was my first time」、「I really enjoy」は過去形の「I really enjoyed」に直しましょう。出来事を時系列で説明するために、「When I was twelve」、「It was my first time」、「During the trip」などの表現を使うと、より自然で明確になります。また、食べたものや訪れた場所を一つ具体的に加えると、回答がさらに印象的になります。

예시: Yes, I did. When I was twelve, my parents took me to Osaka to celebrate my graduation from elementary school. It was my first big trip with my family, and I really enjoyed trying local food and visiting Osaka Castle. I still remember how exciting the journey was.

× when I traveling along

✓ when I travel alone

The sentence describes a habitual action, as shown by usually, so use the simple present tense: travel. The phrase travel alone is also needed to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I really enjoy to see the scenery

✓ I really enjoy seeing the scenery

The verb enjoy must be followed by a gerund, or verb + -ing form, not an infinitive. Use enjoy seeing, not enjoy to see.

× I do not like go to bathroom

✓ I do not like going to the bathroom

The verb like can be followed by a gerund when discussing an activity. Therefore, use like going. The phrase bathroom also normally requires the definite article the in this context.

× go to bathroom and the bullet train

✓ go to the bathroom on the bullet train

Use on, not and, to indicate that the action takes place during a train journey. The preposition on is commonly used with public transportation, such as on the bullet train.

× go to bathroom

✓ go to the bathroom

When referring to the bathroom as a specific facility, use the definite article the. The natural expression is go to the bathroom.

× my parents took me a Osaka prefecture

✓ my parents took me to Osaka Prefecture

The verb take requires the preposition to when indicating a destination: take someone to a place. Therefore, use took me to Osaka Prefecture.

× a Osaka prefecture

✓ Osaka Prefecture

Osaka Prefecture is a proper place name, so it does not require the article a. Also, a cannot be used before Osaka because Osaka begins with a vowel sound.

× because to celebrate my graduation

✓ to celebrate my graduation

Because must be followed by a subject and a finite verb, such as because they wanted to celebrate. When expressing purpose directly, use the infinitive phrase to celebrate instead.

× That is for my first time

✓ That was my first time

The student is describing a past trip, so use the past-tense form was instead of the present-tense form is.

× That is for my first time the big trip with my family

✓ That was my first big trip with my family

The original phrase has an incorrect word order and includes the unnecessary phrase for my time. The natural structure is my first big trip, with the possessive determiner my followed by the ordinal adjective first and the noun phrase big trip.

× I really enjoy eating and sightseeing

✓ I really enjoyed eating and sightseeing

The student is talking about a completed trip in the past, so the past-tense form enjoyed is required instead of the present-tense form enjoy.