Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
수험생
I firmly prefer to sit by the window while travelling. To begin with, I can watch resplendent scenery. However, some people don't prefer to sit by the window while travelling. It's because scenery can trigger emotion sickness, what a tragedy it is.
시험관
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
수험생
When I was a child, my family and I went to Thailand, which is one of the biggest countries in Asia. To be specific, we traveled to plane. After arriving in Thailand, my family and I visited numerous attractions, rode elephants and tried exotic fruits. It was one of the best experiences I've ever.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
점수: 65.0제안: 의견을 직접 밝힌 점은 좋지만, ‘firmly prefer’와 ‘resplendent scenery’는 일상적인 IELTS Part 1 답변에서 다소 부자연스럽고 과장된 표현입니다. ‘motion sickness’가 올바른 표현이며, ‘what a tragedy it is’는 이 문맥에 맞지 않습니다. 또한 반대 의견을 길게 언급하기보다 자신의 선호와 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 효과적입니다. 예를 들어 창밖 풍경이나 사진을 찍을 수 있다는 점을 연결어와 함께 제시해 보세요.
예시: Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I travel. I enjoy looking at the scenery, and it also makes the journey more interesting. For example, I often take photos of the landscape during long train rides. However, I would choose an aisle seat if I were worried about motion sickness.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
점수: 72.0제안: 어린 시절의 여행 경험을 구체적으로 설명하고 활동도 다양하게 제시한 점이 좋습니다. 그러나 ‘one of the biggest countries in Asia’는 사실과 맞지 않고 질문과도 크게 관련이 없으므로 삭제하는 것이 좋습니다. ‘traveled to plane’은 ‘travelled by plane’으로 수정해야 하며, ‘one of the best experiences I’ve ever’는 ‘one of the best experiences I’ve ever had’처럼 완성해야 합니다. 첫 문장에서 가족과 긴 여행을 했다는 직접적인 답을 먼저 제시하고, 그다음 여행 기간이나 인상적인 활동을 연결해 말하면 더 자연스럽습니다.
예시: Yes, I did. When I was about ten, my family and I took a long trip to Thailand by plane. We stayed there for about a week and visited several attractions, including an elephant sanctuary. We also tried some exotic fruits, so it was one of the best travel experiences I’ve ever had.
문법
× To be specific, we traveled to plane.
✓ To be specific, we traveled by plane.
The preposition by is used to describe the means of transportation. Use by plane, by train, or by car, not to plane.
× It was one of the best experiences I've ever.
✓ It was one of the best experiences I've ever had.
The clause I've ever is incomplete because the verb had is missing. The expression one of the best experiences I've ever had is used to describe the best experiences in someone's life.
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