Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, well-organized, and directly answers the question. You provide specific examples and use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “also” effectively. To sound more natural, replace “take a photo of mountains” with “take photos of the mountains,” and avoid repeating “journey” and “long trips” if possible.

예시: Yes, I do. I prefer a window seat because I enjoy watching the scenery as I travel. For example, I can take photos of mountains, beaches, and small towns along the way. It makes long journeys more enjoyable and relaxing.

제안: You answer the question directly, but the response contains several grammar errors and is incomplete. Use “to the southern part of Thailand,” “the journey took several hours,” “I really enjoyed seeing,” and “we usually stopped.” Also, separate the ideas into shorter sentences and complete the final point about what you did at local places. Add a specific example to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me on long road trips to the southern part of Thailand. The journey took several hours, but I really enjoyed seeing the beautiful beaches and green hills along the way. We usually stopped at local restaurants or markets to try regional food and buy snacks.

× Yes, I did when I was a child, my parents often took me on long road trips to southern part of Thailand, the journey to several hours, but I really enjoy seeing a beautiful beach and green hills along the way.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me on long road trips to the southern part of Thailand. The journey took several hours, but I really enjoyed seeing beautiful beaches and green hills along the way.

The original answer contains several comma splices, which occur when independent clauses are joined only with commas. Separate the ideas with full stops or connect them with suitable conjunctions.

× my parents often took me on long road trips to southern part of Thailand

✓ My parents often took me on long road trips to the southern part of Thailand.

The phrase part of Thailand refers to a specific region, so it requires the definite article the. The correct phrase is the southern part of Thailand.

× the journey to several hours, but I really enjoy seeing a beautiful beach and green hills along the way. We usually stop at local

✓ The journey took several hours, but I really enjoyed seeing beautiful beaches and green hills along the way. We usually stopped at local attractions.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Use took instead of to, enjoyed instead of enjoy, and stopped instead of stop.

× We usually stop at local

✓ We usually stopped at local attractions.

The original sentence ends with the adjective local and does not include the noun it describes. Add a suitable noun, such as attractions, to complete the sentence. Because the story is in the past, use stopped.