Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, fluency and specificity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and give one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "see a scenario"; instead name what you enjoy (views, landscapes). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, on train journeys I like to look at the countryside and small towns, which helps me relax and makes the trip more interesting.

제안: Focus on correct tense, word order and specific details. Begin with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then give one or two specific details (where, who, what made it memorable) using linking words like "for example" or "because." Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. For example, we travelled by train from Daka to Silate, and I remember sitting with my siblings, watching the fields and buying snacks on the platform, which made the trip very memorable.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because I see a scenario and

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I like to see the scenery.

Issues: incorrect verb form after 'when' (should be base form 'travel' not 'traveling' here) and incorrect noun 'scenario' (wrong word for view; use 'scenery'). Also 'see a scenery' is unidiomatic; use 'see the scenery' or 'see scenery'. Suggestion: Use simple present after 'when' for habitual actions and choose correct vocabulary ('scenery').

× Yes. When I was a child, I have a long journey memories.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I had many long journey memories.

Issues: tense inconsistency — 'When I was a child' sets past reference, so use past tense 'had' not present 'have'. Also plural and word order: 'a long journey memories' is ungrammatical; use 'many long journey memories' or better 'many memories of long journeys'. Suggestion: Keep past tense for past events and correct noun phrase to 'memories of long journeys'.

× We are family together going to Daka to Silate by train it is too much memorable in our childhood.

✓ We went with our family by train from Daka to Silate, which was very memorable from our childhood.

Multiple errors: incorrect present tense 'are' instead of past 'went'; awkward word order; missing preposition 'from' and extra 'to' placement; 'too much memorable' is ungrammatical — use 'very memorable' or 'a very memorable experience'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past events, use correct prepositions for travel routes ('from ... to ...'), and use natural modifiers ('very memorable' or 'a memorable experience in our childhood').