Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use correct verb forms and complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct verb forms ("When I travel"), possessive pronouns, and concise reasons will make the answer more natural. Also avoid unfinished clauses—finish your thought and give a concrete example of what you like to see from the window.

예시: I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. Firstly, I enjoy looking at the scenery because it helps me relax and feel the journey more vividly. For example, on train trips I like watching passing villages and mountains, which makes the trip more interesting.

제안: Correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details. Use plural verbs and natural phrasing ("my family liked travelling"). Add linking words (e.g., "for example", "such as") and a brief concrete memory to make the response vivid. Keep it concise—two to three sentences total.

예시: Yes, I had several long journeys with my family when I was a child. My parents and siblings loved travelling, so we often went to different places such as beaches and mountains. For example, I remember a week-long trip to the coast where we spent every day swimming and exploring small towns.

× Usually when I travelling, I prefer to sit near the window.

✓ Usually when I travel, I prefer to sit near the window.

The original uses 'travelling' where the base verb 'travel' is required after the time expression 'when I'. This is a present tense statement about habitual action, so use simple present 'I travel'. Change 'travelling' to 'travel' to fix verb form. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines: 'when I travel'.

× First of all my for a reason is to see a view more clearly so I can see all I see when I was

✓ First of all, my main reason is to see the view more clearly so I can see everything.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('my for a reason') and an unfinished clause 'when I was' that is inappropriate because the speaker is describing a general preference now. Use 'my main reason' and 'see the view more clearly' and replace 'all I see when I was' with 'everything' to complete the thought. Also add a comma after 'First of all'. Suggestion: Keep the sentence complete and use present tense for general preferences.

× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family.

✓ When I was a child, I took a long trip with my family.

'Had a long journey' is understandable but non-idiomatic; use 'took a long trip' or 'went on a long journey'. Also add a comma after the time clause. Use past simple 'took' which correctly matches 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: Use 'take a trip' or 'go on a journey' for natural phrasing.

× My father, my mother and all of my family is like to traveling.

✓ My father, my mother, and the rest of my family like to travel.

The subject is plural ('My father, my mother, and the rest of my family'), so the verb should be 'like' (not 'is like'). Also, 'like to traveling' mixes infinitive and -ing; use the base verb 'travel' after 'like to' or 'like' + gerund 'traveling'. Use 'the rest of my family' for clarity and add commas in the list. Suggestion: Use plural verb 'like' and correct verb form: 'like to travel' or 'like traveling'.