Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğal ama biraz tekrar ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor; daha akıcı ve öz olması gerekir. 'the view' ve 'natural view' ifadeleri gereksiz tekrara yol açıyor; 'especially' ile örnekleri bağlarken bir geçiş sözü kullanın ve cümle sayısını 3–4'te tutun. Ayrıca 'especially, like' yerine 'especially' veya 'such as' kullanın. Öneri: kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından bir bağlaçla iki spesifik örnek verin ve nedenini bir sonuç cümlesiyle kapatın.

예시: Yes, I usually choose a window seat because I enjoy the scenery. For example, I love watching the sky at sunrise and the sea when we fly over the coast. This helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

제안: Cevap anlaşılır fakat zaman kullanımı ve ifade akıcılığı zayıf; geçmiş zaman tutarlılığı yok ('It's six months ago' yerine 'It was six months ago'). Ayrıca cümleler kısa ve tekrarlayıcı; daha fazla özgül detay (nereleri gördünüz, hangi kültürel deneyimler) ekleyin. Bağlaçlarla cümleleri birleştirerek ve 3–4 cümle sınırına uyarak daha doğal yanıt verin.

예시: Yes, I had a long journey with my family about six months ago when we visited Qatar. We explored Doha's souks and museums and tried traditional Qatari dishes. I enjoyed learning about the local culture, and the trip was especially memorable because I shared it with my parents and sister.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel, because I like to see the view and the natural view, especially, like the sky, the sea, the animals.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I like to see the view, especially the sky, the sea, and the animals.

The sentence has redundancy and punctuation issues rather than a core tense error; however it fits 'Present tense issue' because simple present is used for habitual actions and should be concise. Remove the repeated phrase 'the natural view' and the unnecessary 'like' before the list. Use commas to separate items and do not use a comma before 'because' in this short clause. Suggestion: keep simple present for habits and list items in parallel form: 'the sky, the sea, and the animals.'

× Yes, I had one. It's six months ago.

✓ Yes, I had one. It was six months ago.

The original uses 'It's' (it is) to refer to a past time, which is inconsistent. Use past tense 'was' to match 'six months ago.' Suggestion: when referring to past events use past tense verbs and past time expressions together: 'It was six months ago.'

× We visit Qatar.

✓ We visited Qatar.

The student used base form 'visit' instead of the past form. Because the context is a past trip ('six months ago'), the verb must be in past tense. Suggestion: use past participle/past simple 'visited' for completed past actions: 'We visited Qatar.'

× It was so fun.

✓ It was so much fun.

While 'It was so fun' is understandable in informal speech, the more natural phrasing is 'It was so much fun' or 'It was great.' Add 'much' to modify 'fun' correctly. Suggestion: prefer 'It was a lot of fun' or 'It was so much fun.'

× We saw a lot of things, a lot of cultures in there and I loved it so much, especially I was with my family, my dad, my mom, my sister, and I like it so much.

✓ We saw many things and experienced many cultures there, and I loved it, especially because I was with my family: my dad, my mom, and my sister.

The original sentence has repetition, incorrect preposition use ('in there'), awkward conjunctions, and tense/person inconsistency ('I loved it' past vs 'I like it so much' present). Fit past context by keeping past tense. Replace 'a lot of things, a lot of cultures' with 'many things and experienced many cultures' for clarity and parallelism. Use 'there' without 'in' and explain reason with 'because'. Remove the present 'I like it so much' to maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid repetition; use parallel structures and appropriate prepositions.