Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives reasons, but has some grammatical errors and minor awkward phrasing. Improve grammar (verb forms, articles), reduce redundancy, and use linking words to join ideas smoothly. Also keep it within 3–4 sentences and add a specific example to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat when I travel, especially on airplanes, because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, on a recent flight I watched the sunrise over the mountains, which was very calming. Because of that, I often choose a window seat to relax and pass the time.

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows personal experience, but it contains unclear place names, grammar mistakes (tenses, articles, word forms), and awkward phrasing that make it hard to follow. Be specific about the place name, use past tense consistently, and add linking words and a brief detail about the trip (how long, what you did) to enrich the response.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school, my parents took me on a long trip to Hongkou district in Fuzhou City, which is quite far from our hometown. Because the journey took more than ten hours by car, we spent a lot of time playing games and telling stories to pass the time.

× Of course, I prefer to sit by the window, especially when travel by airplane.

✓ Of course, I prefer to sit by the window, especially when traveling by airplane.

After 'when' we need a verb form that fits a time clause. Use the -ing form 'traveling' (or the present simple 'I travel') to show the general action. In conversational American English use 'traveling'; in British English use 'travelling'. This fixes the missing -ing form required in this context.

× The beautiful scenery makes me relaxed, I can see the sunset or sunrise beside the window.

✓ The beautiful scenery makes me feel relaxed; I can see the sunset or sunrise from the window.

The verb 'make' is typically followed by an object plus a base verb ('make me feel relaxed'), not an adjective alone in this structure. Also use a semicolon or a period to separate independent clauses. Use 'from the window' rather than 'beside the window' to indicate viewpoint. This corrects verb-complement structure and prepositional choice.

× Oh yes I did. When I started in primary school my parents took me to visit Hongjou of Femur City in China It's really far from my hometown so we take a long time at year.

✓ Oh yes, I did. When I started primary school, my parents took me to visit Hongjou in Femur City in China. It was really far from my hometown, so we spent a long time there that year.

Several past-tense inconsistencies need correction. Use past simple consistently for past events: 'started primary school' (no in), 'took me to visit', 'It was really far'. 'We take a long time at year' is ungrammatical — replace with 'we spent a long time there that year' to express duration in the past. Also add commas for clarity and separate sentences to avoid run-ons.