Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体表达清楚，观点明确，但存在语法和连贯性问题，需要注意主谓一致、时态及句子流畅度；避免重复词汇，并用连接词使句子更自然。建议练习将想法分成1个主题句加1–2个具体支持句，控制在不超过5个句子内。可以改进的点： 1) 修正语法（e.g. “sitting by the window and you can” → 省略冗余或改为从句）； 2) 使用更准确的词汇（e.g. “on the road”替代“in the road”，用“relaxing/serene”替代“very very peaceful”）； 3) 增加连接词（e.g. “because”, “so”, “also”）并合理分配。

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I can watch the passing scenery, which I find very relaxing. I also enjoy listening to music while looking outside, as it helps me unwind and makes the journey more enjoyable.

제안: 回答包含必要信息，但句子不完整且有重复和时态错误，需要改进叙述的完整性与细节具体性。建议使用一到两句提供地点、方式和感受，并用连接词串联。注意避免重复单词并使用过去时态一致（e.g. “we travelled”）。可加入具体细节（如“mountains, rivers, small towns”）以丰富内容。

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child we travelled by car from Guangdong to Yunnan, which is quite far. The journey was memorable because we passed many mountains and small villages, and I enjoyed seeing different landscapes along the way.

× Yes, I do, because sitting by the window and you can watch the scenery in the road, it feel very very peaceful.

✓ Yes, I do, because sitting by the window you can watch the scenery on the road; it feels very, very peaceful.

该句存在多处问题： 1) “sitting by the window and you can watch...” 中的“and”导致结构混乱。应把“sitting by the window”作为动名词短语引导的状语，直接接主句，因此去掉“and”。 2) 介词使用错误：“in the road” 应为 “on the road”，表示在路上看到的风景。 3) 主谓不一致：“it feel” 中主语 it 为第三人称单数，谓语动词需用第三人称单数形式“feels”。 改进建议：把句子拆分或用连词清晰连接，注意介词搭配并使动词与主语在人称和数上一致。 示例练习：把类似句子改写为“Because sitting by the window, I can watch the scenery on the road, and it feels peaceful.” 来巩固结构与时态。

× You can also listen some music.

✓ You can also listen to some music.

动词 listen 后需要跟介词 to 引出所听的对象，因此应为 “listen to some music”。 改进建议：记住固定搭配，练习类似句型：listen to music / listen to the radio。

× We went to Yunnan province.

✓ We went to Yunnan Province.

句子本身时态正确（过去时），但地名中“Province”作为专有名词应大写。若仅限语法类别，本句无需更改时态，主要是大小写常规问题（不在需改的语法列表中），因此示例仅调整为规范写法。

× It is very far away from Guangdong and we travel there by car so we can can go past past many, many.

✓ It is very far away from Guangdong, and we travelled there by car, so we could pass many places along the way.

原句问题包括： 1) 时态混乱：叙述童年经历应使用过去时，句中“we travel”应改为过去时“we travelled/we traveled”。 2) 情态动词与上下文：原文用“can can”重复且不合适，过去经历用“could”更恰当，表示当时能够做到。 3) 重复词汇：“can can” 和 “past past” 明显是口误或重复，应删除重复并使用正确单词“pass”。 4) 介词/搭配：用“pass many places” 或 “pass many towns” 更合适，且可加短语“along the way” 表示一路上。 改进建议：讲述过去经历时一致使用过去时，避免口语重复，注意情态动词与时态一致。练习将现在时句子改为过去时，并用合适的动词短语（pass places / go past）。