Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然且直接，但存在语法和用词不准确的问题，且句子较冗长。改进要点： 1) 语法与时态：把“when traveling”统一时态，改正“when I back to my hometown”为“I go back to my hometown”或“I return to my hometown”。 2) 用词搭配：把“entire scenery of the outdoor”改为“the scenery outside”或“the whole view outside”。 3) 简洁性：避免重复，例如“sit by the window”与“sit nearby the window”重复表达，合并为一句。 4) 连贯性：在举例前加连接词如“for example”或“for instance”，并用一两句具体说明你喜欢看什么（山、城市、云海等）。

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the scenery outside. For example, when I return to my hometown, I like watching the passing countryside and mountains through the window.

제안: 总体回答清楚且相关，但可以更具体并改善表达自然度。改进要点： 1) 细节化：说明一次具体的长途旅行时长、目的地或活动，如“we traveled for six hours to visit my grandparents”或“we went to a famous scenic spot”。 2) 连接词和习惯表达：把“Like every Spring Festival”改为“As a child, every Spring Festival we would…”或“Every Spring Festival, we usually…”以提高流畅性。 3) 避免模糊词：将“other attractions nearby our hometown”具体化为“temples, parks, or rivers”之类的具体地点。

예시: Yes, I often had long journeys with my family when I was a child. Every Spring Festival we would travel for several hours to visit nearby attractions, such as temples and scenic parks, and spend the day sightseeing and eating local food.

× Yes, I love sitting by the window when traveling because I can enjoy the entire scenery of the outdoor.

✓ Yes, I love sitting by the window when travelling because I can enjoy the entire outdoor scenery.

句中短语“the entire scenery of the outdoor”是不自然且介词使用不当。正确表达应为“entire outdoor scenery”或“the entire scenery outdoors”。建议把“outdoor”作为形容词放在“scenery”前，或使用副词“outdoors”放在句末。注意英式拼写一致（travelling）。

× For example, when I back to my hometown, I often sit nearby the window.

✓ For example, when I go back to my hometown, I often sit near the window.

原句缺少动词形式，“when I back”应使用动词短语“go back”；“nearby the window”是介词用法错误，应使用“near the window”或“by the window”。建议使用“go back”表示回去，介词搭配用“near”与“the window”。

× Like every Spring Festival, we visited the other attractions nearby our hometown.

✓ Like every Spring Festival, we visited other attractions near our hometown.

句中“the other attractions nearby our hometown”中“the other”与上下文不匹配，且“nearby”作为副词不应直接修饰名词“our hometown”。应去掉定冠词“the”，使用“other attractions”，并用介词短语“near our hometown”。简体中文建议：将“the other”去掉，改为“other”，并将“nearby our hometown”改为“near our hometown”。