Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答自然且直接，但有几处可改进：1) 句子略显冗长且重复（例如 “like windows, clouds and so on” 不够具体）；2) 连接词使用可以更流畅；3) 可以加入更具体的感受或理由以丰富内容（如看到海洋、城市或拍照）。建议控制在3-4句话内，使用具体词汇并加入一两个连词使逻辑更清晰。

예시: I usually choose the window seat because I enjoy watching the changing landscape, such as coastlines, mountains and passing clouds. Also, it gives me a bit more room to stretch my arms and relax during the trip, so I feel more comfortable on long journeys.

제안: 回答内容相关但表达不够具体且有语法小错误：1) “like Dalian, Dali and so on” 不够具体，可列举1-2具体活动或景点；2) 句子“experienced local things” 太模糊，应说明具体体验（例如参观寺庙、尝试手工艺）；3) 注意语法和词序（如 “left me deep impression” 应为 “left a deep impression on me”）。建议用3-4句，包含时间/地点/具体活动与感受。

예시: Yes, I went on a long trip with my family when I was a child, and we visited places such as Dalian and Dali. We sampled local dishes like seafood and traditional rice noodles, and I remember visiting a famous temple in Dali which left a deep impression on me. Those experiences made me curious about different cultures and food.

× Honestly, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can have a set of changing scenery like windows, clouds and so on.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I can enjoy a changing set of scenery, such as windows, clouds, and so on.

原句中用法上主要问题是措辞不自然（不是严格语法错误），但与第8项（动名词/动词-ing形式）相关的是“have a set of changing scenery”不地道，通常用动词 enjoy + 名词短语或使用 present participle 表达持续变化的景色。建议改为 “enjoy a changing set of scenery” 或 “enjoy the changing scenery”。这样语义更清晰，动词搭配更自然。建议多用常见动词搭配（enjoy + 名词短语）来表达感受。

× Additionally, sitting by the window I can have more space to refresh my arms and body.

✓ Additionally, sitting by the window, I can have more space to stretch my arms and body.

原句中副词/状语位置和词汇搭配有问题。短语“sitting by the window I can have...” 应在“sitting by the window”后加逗号以分隔状语从句；另外“refresh my arms and body”搭配不自然，英语中常用“stretch”来表示伸展四肢。按第20项，副词/状语位置需正确放置于句首或句中并用逗号分隔。建议在此类句子中使用逗号并选择更恰当的动词（如 stretch）。

× Luckily, I had a long journey with my family as a child.

✓ Luckily, I took a long journey with my family as a child.

原句用法并不会产生严重歧义，但更地道的表达是动词 take（或 went on）与 journey 搭配，而不是单独使用 had a journey。按照第5项的过去时问题，建议使用常见的过去时搭配“took a journey”或“went on a long journey”。中文建议：用更常见的动词搭配来表达过去的旅行，如 “took” 或 “went on”。

× We tried many local food and experienced local things which left me deep impression.

✓ We tried many local foods and experienced local activities, which left me with a deep impression.

原句存在几个问题：一是“many local food”名词单复数错误，应为 “many local foods” 或 “a lot of local food”；二是“experienced local things”表述不准确，应改为更具体的名词如 “local activities” 或 “local customs”；三是“left me deep impression”缺少冠词和介词，正确为“left me with a deep impression”或“left a deep impression on me”。这里按照第8项（动名词/动词-ing）和第1项（单复数）同时涉及，但主要修正为更自然的搭配和语法。建议多注意可数名词复数形式和固定搭配（leave sb with a ... / leave a... on sb）。