Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers like “umm” and “uh,” and correct unclear phrases (e.g., “irritated in the center” → “feel sick”). Use varied but relevant vocabulary such as “prefer,” “scenic views,” and “motion sickness.” Keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. Firstly, I often suffer from motion sickness, so a window seat helps me feel less unwell because I can focus on a fixed point outside. Secondly, I enjoy the scenic views, which makes the journey more pleasant. For these reasons I usually choose a window seat.

제안: Give a direct answer first and then add a clear reason or future plan. Fix grammar and use linking words like “however” or “but” to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and vague phrasing (e.g., “I like to live long journey” is unclear). Be specific about why you haven’t had such a journey and what you hope to do in the future.

예시: No, I didn’t have a long journey with my family when I was a child. However, I would love to go on one because we were usually busy with work and school. In the future, I hope to take an extended trip with my parents to visit national parks and experience different cultures.

× I also prefer to sit by window side because umm, I have stomach problem and I get uh, irritated in the center and another reason is uh, I like to see the beautiful views, uh, during, uh, traveling so I would like to sit.

✓ I also prefer to sit by the window because I have a stomach problem and I get irritated in the middle, and another reason is that I like to see the beautiful views during traveling, so I would like to sit there.

Several article errors: 'by window side' should be 'by the window' (use definite article for a specific window). 'I have stomach problem' needs an article: 'a stomach problem'. Also streamline phrasing: 'in the center' is unclear; 'in the middle' is more natural. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific known nouns and 'a' for singular countable nouns when introducing them. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× No, I have no experience with my family as long journey I like but I like to live long journey with my parents and my family.

✓ No, I have no experience of taking a long journey with my family, but I would like to take a long trip with my parents and family.

Tense and phrasing errors: use 'have no experience of taking' rather than 'have no experience with ... as long journey'. 'I like but I like to live long journey' is incorrect tense and verb choice. Use modal 'would like' to express desire for a future action and 'take a long trip/journey' is the correct collocation. Also use 'with my family' consistently. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So I have no experience yet but I hope we have a long journey and with my family.

✓ So I have no experience yet, but I hope we will have a long journey with my family.

Incorrect future tense form and word order: 'I hope we have a long journey' is understandable but for a future event it's more natural to use 'we will have' or 'we can have.' Also remove the extra 'and' before 'with my family.' Use 'will' to indicate future intention/hope. Grammar problem type ID: 7