Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific reason with a linking word. Use varied vocabulary and correct grammar (articles, plurals, verb forms). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually avoid window seats when I travel because they make me feel isolated. For example, when I sit by the window on buses I tend to zone out and miss social interaction, so I prefer aisle seats where I can talk to other passengers.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid redundant phrases like “since I was young” and “I was a child” together.

예시: No, I rarely had long trips with my family when I was a child because my parents worked long hours. As a result, they prioritized my education over holidays, so we mostly stayed in our hometown and spent vacations at home.

× I don't prefer to sit by window when traveling because it makes me feel more alone and I feel lonely when I sit by the windows and I will be losing my sense of belonging.

✓ I don't prefer to sit by the window when traveling because it makes me feel more alone, and I feel lonely when I sit by the window; I feel like I will lose my sense of belonging.

Incorrect use of the definite article (ID 17): 'by window' and 'by the windows' are incorrect; English requires 'the window' to refer to the seat next to a specific window. Also tidied repeated ideas and future phrase: 'I will be losing' is awkward here; use 'I feel like I will lose' or simply 'I lose' to match the present feeling. Use commas and a semicolon to improve sentence structure and clarity.

× Absolutely no. Honestly, since I was young and I was a child, I don't have the opportunity to have a long journey with my families as they are busy for their works and they are focusing on my studies more than. Entertainment.

✓ Absolutely not. Honestly, since I was young, I did not have the opportunity to take a long journey with my family because they were busy with their work and focused more on my studies than on entertainment.

Singular and plural issue (ID 1) and related article/word choice errors: 'families' is incorrect because 'my family' is a single unit. 'Works' should be 'work' (uncountable) or 'jobs'. Also tense and structure: the question asks about childhood, so past tense is appropriate ('did not have', 'were busy', 'focused'). 'More than. Entertainment' is ungrammatical; use 'more on my studies than on entertainment.' Combined corrections address plurality and improve grammar and clarity.