Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy like “by the window side” and choose either “nature” or “the view.” Also keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer a window seat because I enjoy looking at the scenery as we travel. For example, seeing landscapes and small towns pass by helps me relax and makes long journeys more interesting.

제안: Your answer gives good content but needs clearer structure and correction of grammar and cohesion. Begin with a direct sentence stating the trip, then use linking words to add specific details (purpose, duration, memories). Remove unclear fragments like “for UH” and fix punctuation. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and provide one or two concrete details to support your statement.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I travelled with my family from Punjab to Delhi, which took about six or seven hours. We went for my cousin’s wedding, and the trip was memorable because we enjoyed the countryside views and had long conversations in the car.

× Yes, I would prefer to sit by the window side to enjoy the nature or view.

✓ Yes, I would prefer to sit by the window to enjoy the view.

Using 'by the window side' is redundant and non-idiomatic; native speakers say 'sit by the window' or 'sit by the window seat'. 'Enjoy the nature' is incorrect collocation here; use 'enjoy the view' or 'enjoy nature'. Suggestion: say 'sit by the window' and 'enjoy the view' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I had a long journey with my family for about six to seven hours from Punjab to Delhi for UH.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family of about six to seven hours from Punjab to Delhi to attend my cousin's wedding.

The sentence has awkward phrasing 'for UH' and unclear purpose. Use past tense 'had' is correct but the purpose should be expressed as an infinitive phrase 'to attend'. Also 'for about six to seven hours' is better as 'of about six to seven hours' or 'that lasted about six to seven hours'. Suggestion: restructure to 'a long journey with my family of about six to seven hours' and use 'to attend' for purpose.

× For attending my cousin's wedding and it was a beautiful journey with lots of memories as we enjoyed the view and talks on through the.

✓ We were going to attend my cousin's wedding, and it was a beautiful journey with lots of memories as we enjoyed the view and talked along the way.

The original is a fragment starting with 'For attending' and then a redundant 'and it was'. Also 'talks on through the' is ungrammatical. Correct by combining clauses: use 'We were going to attend' or 'to attend' and join with 'and'. Use the past tense 'talked' for completed action and idiomatic phrase 'along the way' or 'during the journey'.