Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid pronunciation/word-choice errors (e.g. "winter" -> "window", "Window Seal" unclear), reduce redundancy, and keep answer within 2–4 concise sentences. Use one or two linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and give a brief specific reason or example (e.g. scenery, fresh air, watching landscapes).

예시: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery change. For example, on train journeys I like to see fields and villages go by, and on flights I enjoy cloud formations. Also, sitting by the window helps me relax while I listen to music or sip tea.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, correct tense use and concise structure. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I often had long family trips as a child."), then give one or two specific supporting details (where you went, a memorable activity) using linking words like "for example" or "because." Avoid filler phrases and unclear fragments (e.g. "UH-34 days").

예시: Yes, I often went on long family trips when I was a child. For example, every summer my parents took me on two- or three-week tours around southern India, where we visited temples and beaches. I really enjoyed these trips because they let me see different states and make lasting memories with my family.

× Absolutely, I love to sit near the winter while I travel, even if it's by flight or train or bus, Whatever be the mode of transport, Window Seal offers a very good view.

✓ Absolutely, I love to sit near the window while I travel, even if it's by plane, train, or bus. Whatever the mode of transport, the window seat offers a very good view.

The sentence contains a wrong preposition/word: 'winter' is a spelling error for 'window' (lexical choice) and 'by flight' should be 'by plane' or 'on a flight'; also 'Window Seal' is incorrect and should be 'window seat'. Use of commas and sentence boundaries were fixed. Suggestions: replace 'near the winter' with 'near the window', use 'plane' or 'on a flight' for air travel, use commas to separate items in a list, and use 'window seat' with lowercase and correct spelling. Grammar issue type ID: 11

× It helps us to sit and relax by ensuring the view having a tea or enjoy listening to music.

✓ It helps us sit and relax, enjoy a cup of tea, or listen to music while watching the view.

The original sentence mixes verb forms and has awkward phrasing. 'Helps us to sit and relax' is acceptable but 'by ensuring the view having a tea or enjoy listening to music' is ungrammatical. Correct by using parallel verb structures: 'sit and relax, enjoy, or listen' and include 'while watching the view' to clarify the relationship. Suggestions: keep verbs parallel and use gerunds consistently when listing activities. Grammar issue type ID: 6

× When I was a child, my parents do always take me for UH-34 days tours during my summer vacations.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always took me on 30–34 day tours during my summer vacations.

The sentence uses present tense 'do always take' incorrectly for a past habitual action; it should be simple past 'took'. Also 'for UH-34 days tours' contains an unclear token 'UH' and incorrect preposition: use 'on 30–34 day tours'. Suggestions: use past tense for past habits, replace 'for' with 'on' when talking about taking someone on a tour, and write numeric ranges clearly. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× It will be exploring some parts of the southern part of India because we come from the South and I have seen most of the states in the southern part of India while I was a child and I really enjoy those experiences because it helps.

✓ We explored parts of southern India because we come from the South. I saw most of the states in southern India when I was a child, and I really enjoyed those experiences because they helped me.

The original mixes future 'It will be exploring' with present/past context; past tense is required. Use simple past 'explored' and 'saw' for past events, and 'enjoyed' and 'helped' to maintain past reference. Also change 'it helps' to 'they helped me' to refer to experiences. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (use past for past events), make pronoun references clear, and break long sentences into shorter ones for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 5}]} PMID:0anceled