Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct grammar and concise phrasing, and include one specific detail. Use a linking phrase to add the reason. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer a window seat when I travel. I like looking at the clouds and the landscape because it relaxes me and makes the journey more enjoyable.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, correct sentence structure, avoid repeating words, and add one specific memorable detail (where, how long, or what you did). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, we often took long train journeys to my maternal grandparents' house when I was a child. Those trips were memorable because we spent several days there and I remember playing in their large garden and sharing meals with my cousins.

× I love to sit in next to the window seat because I think the window seat you can view the cloud and it's so pretty and just make your mind feel relaxed and emotional is like calm and comfortable.

✓ I love sitting next to the window seat because I think you can view the clouds and they are so pretty, which makes my mind feel relaxed and calm.

Errors: incorrect use of infinitive 'to sit in next to' and awkward phrasing. Use verb + -ing ('sitting') after 'love' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'in next to' is redundant; use 'sitting next to'. 'The window seat you can view' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'you can view the clouds'. 'Cloud' should be plural 'clouds' (plural issue, covered by Problem Type 1). 'It's so pretty and just make your mind feel' has subject-verb disagreement and awkward structure; change to 'they are so pretty, which makes my mind feel...' Suggestions: use 'love + -ing' for preferences, pluralize countable nouns when general, and connect clauses with relative pronouns or conjunctions to avoid run-on sentences.

× I love to sit in next to the window seat because I think the window seat you can view the cloud and it's so pretty and just make your mind feel relaxed and emotional is like calm and comfortable.

✓ I love sitting next to the window seat because I think you can view the clouds and they are so pretty, which makes my mind feel relaxed and calm.

'Cloud' is a countable noun when referring to individual clouds; when speaking generally use the plural 'clouds' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Also adjust related pronouns ('they' for 'clouds') and verb agreement ('they are'). Suggestion: when describing general scenes, use plurals for countable items and ensure pronouns match number.

× I love to sit in next to the window seat because I think the window seat you can view the cloud and it's so pretty and just make your mind feel relaxed and emotional is like calm and comfortable.

✓ I love sitting next to the window seat because I think you can view the clouds and they are so pretty, which makes my mind feel relaxed and calm.

Problems with subject-verb agreement: 'it's so pretty and just make your mind feel' mixes singular and plural subjects and verbs incorrectly (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'It' cannot refer to 'clouds'; use 'they' and 'they are' and 'which makes' to match singular/plural consistently. Suggestion: identify the subject first and ensure verbs and pronouns agree in number.

× I love to sit in next to the window seat because I think the window seat you can view the cloud and it's so pretty and just make your mind feel relaxed and emotional is like calm and comfortable.

✓ I love sitting next to the window seat because I think you can view the clouds and they are so pretty, which makes my mind feel relaxed and calm.

This sentence is a run-on with misplaced phrases and unclear references (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'the window seat you can view the cloud' is missing connectors and relative pronouns. Also 'emotional is like calm and comfortable' is awkward. Suggestion: break ideas into clearer clauses, use 'which' or relative clauses, and simplify adjectives ('relaxed and calm').

× Actually I think we did we go to my mother's parents' house when I was a child so we spend a lot of time in there and we just go there by train and it's really memorable unforgettable and memorable life.

✓ Actually, I think we did. We went to my mother's parents' house when I was a child, so we spent a lot of time there and we just went there by train. It was really an unforgettable and memorable time in my life.

Multiple tense errors: mixing present and past ('we did we go', 'we spend', 'we just go') when describing past events (Grammar Problem Type 5). Use past simple ('went', 'spent', 'went') to describe completed actions. Also 'in there' should be 'there' (preposition issue) and 'memorable unforgettable and memorable life' is redundant and awkward—use 'unforgettable' or 'memorable time in my life'. Suggestion: consistently use past tense when recounting past experiences and avoid repetition.

× Actually I think we did we go to my mother's parents' house when I was a child so we spend a lot of time in there and we just go there by train and it's really memorable unforgettable and memorable life.

✓ Actually, I think we did. We went to my mother's parents' house when I was a child, so we spent a lot of time there and we just went there by train. It was really an unforgettable and memorable time in my life.

'In there' is incorrect or unnecessary; use 'there' when referring to a place previously mentioned (Grammar Problem Type 11). Also 'go to' vs 'went to' should match tense. Suggestion: remove redundant prepositions and ensure prepositions fit the verb tense and context.

× Actually I think we did we go to my mother's parents' house when I was a child so we spend a lot of time in there and we just go there by train and it's really memorable unforgettable and memorable life.

✓ Actually, I think we did. We went to my mother's parents' house when I was a child, so we spent a lot of time there and we just went there by train. It was really an unforgettable and memorable time in my life.

The sentence contains run-on elements and missing punctuation, causing confusion (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'We did we go' is ungrammatical; split into sentences and use correct verb forms. Also avoid repeating synonyms ('unforgettable and memorable'). Suggestion: use short sentences, correct past-tense verbs, and concise vocabulary to improve clarity.