Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I like seeing changing landscapes, such as forests and small towns, which helps me relax during long journeys.

제안: Answer directly with correct tense and clearer details. Use a topic sentence to state whether you had long childhood journeys, then add one clear example with a linking word and specific detail (when, where, duration). Avoid broken sentences and incorrect verb forms.

예시: No, I didn't have long journeys with my family when I was a child. However, after I got married I took a very long trip with my husband to the capital; for instance, we had a 12-hour bus ride, which was quite tiring.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when, when I'm, when I'm traveling, uh, because I am, I enjoy watching the scenery, uh, like, uh, trees, the landscape, uh, and uh, trees, landscape and uh, towns, uh, that's helping me feel relaxed and make the journey, uh, more.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because I enjoy watching the scenery, like trees, the landscape and towns; that helps me feel relaxed and makes the journey more enjoyable.

Errors: unnecessary hesitations and repeated words; incorrect progressive 'that's helping' and missing subject-verb agreement in 'make the journey more'. Rule and suggestion: Use simple present or present continuous appropriately. 'That helps' (simple present) expresses a habitual effect. Use 'makes the journey more enjoyable' for natural adjective use. Remove filler words and repetitions to make the sentence fluent. Grammar problem type ID:8

× And no, I haven't, I haven't a long journey with my family when I was a child, but when I am.

✓ No, I didn't have a long journey with my family when I was a child.

Errors: incorrect use of present perfect 'I haven't' with a finished past time expression 'when I was a child' and extra words. Rule and suggestion: For actions completed in a definite past time, use simple past: 'I didn't have.' Remove extraneous words and contractions that break the sentence. Grammar problem type ID:5

× When I married, I went to the hub with my husband and the journey was very long. 12 hour bypass.

✓ When I married, I went to the hub with my husband and the journey was very long — it was a 12-hour trip.

Errors: sentence fragment '12 hour bypass' and awkward noun 'bypass.' Rule and suggestion: Use a hyphen in compound number adjectives before a noun ('12-hour') and choose a more natural noun: 'trip' or 'journey.' Combine fragments into a complete sentence: 'it was a 12-hour trip.' Grammar problem type ID:5