Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and correct small grammar errors; give a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific supporting details with linking words, and keep the reply under five sentences. For example, say you prefer the window seat, give a reason, then an example. Avoid filler words like “uh” and incorrect prepositions such as “looking at to”.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when travelling because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, when I travel by train I like to look at the mountains and villages along the route, which makes the journey relaxing.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and avoid repetition and fillers. Mention a particular long journey or a memorable detail (when, where, who) to make the response concrete and concise.

예시: Yes, I often had long journeys with my family when I was a child. For example, my parents and I used to take weekend trips to the countryside, where we spent the day hiking and having picnics; those trips are my fondest childhood memories.

× Of course, I like to sit, uh, alongside the window because, uh, looking at to the environment, I really enjoy that.

✓ Of course, I like to sit alongside the window because looking at the scenery really makes me enjoy the trip.

The original uses 'looking at to the environment' which has incorrect preposition and noun choice and awkward structure. This matches 'Verb + -ing form' because the gerund phrase 'looking at' should be followed directly by the object without 'to'. Also 'environment' is less natural here; 'scenery' fits travel context. Suggestion: use 'looking at the scenery' or 'looking out at the scenery', and place the gerund phrase as the subject or object properly (e.g., 'because looking at the scenery makes me enjoy the trip').

× For example, when I was, uh, uh, travel, travelling in the train, uh, I like to watch mountains.

✓ For example, when I was travelling on the train, I liked to watch the mountains.

This sentence mixes present tense 'I like' with a past-time clause 'when I was travelling', and contains redundant forms ('travel, travelling'). The error matches 'Past tense issue' because the past context requires past tense 'liked'. Also use 'on the train' and include 'the' before 'mountains' for specificity. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent by using past tense in subordinate clauses describing past experiences.

× Of course we, we went together a lot of uh, picnics and trips, uh, especially with my parents and yeah, I really enjoy that And I also remember all the picnics and trips when I was, uh.

✓ Of course we went on a lot of picnics and trips, especially with my parents, and I really enjoyed them. I also remember all those picnics and trips from my childhood.

The original has tense inconsistency and minor structure problems. 'We went together a lot of picnics' is ungrammatical; the correct preposition is 'went on a lot of picnics'. The clause then switches to present 'I really enjoy that' though referring to past experiences; this is a 'Subject-verb agreement errors' and tense consistency issue (should be past: 'I really enjoyed them'). Also ending fragment 'when I was, uh' is incomplete; clarify as 'from my childhood' to complete thought. Suggestion: use 'went on' with plural 'picnics and trips', keep past tense throughout, and replace vague fragments with clear nouns like 'my childhood'.