Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 语言更自然、句子更连贯并纠正错误用词。注意把“which helps me on wind”改为正确表达（如“which helps me unwind”或“calm me down”）。回答要有主题句并用连接词衔接细节，句子不要过多断裂，保持在最多五句内。可以补充具体例子（某次旅程看到的景色或感受）以增加具体性。

예시: Yes, I usually choose a window seat because I can enjoy the changing scenery and it helps me unwind. For example, on a long train trip last year I watched golden fields and small villages pass by, which made me feel relaxed and less stressed. I also like taking photos through the window to remember the journey.

제안: 修正语法与用词，使答案更简洁自然。把时间状语放在句首或句中并用正确动词形式（例如“we visited Disneyland”）。增加一两句具体细节（最喜欢的展览或游乐设施）以丰富内容并使用连接词使句子流畅。

예시: Yes, I did. When I was ten, my parents took me to the Shanghai Museum and we also visited Disneyland. It was a wonderful experience because I loved the interactive exhibits at the museum and the thrilling rides at Disneyland, especially the roller coaster. That trip left me with many happy memories.

× Of course I prefer a window seat because I can watch beautiful scenery go by, which helps me on wind.

✓ Of course I prefer a window seat because I can watch beautiful scenery go by, which helps me unwind.

原句使用了“on wind”顯然是拼寫或詞彙錯誤，應為動詞短語“unwind”（放鬆）。這屬於動詞及其形式的使用錯誤。建議記住常用動詞短語並注意拼寫，例如 “unwind” 表示放鬆，而不是將單詞拆成 on + wind。

× For example. On long train journeys, looking at the countryside makes me less stressed.

✓ For example, on long train journeys, looking at the countryside makes me less stressed.

原句把“For example.” 單獨成句，造成句子結構不連貫。正確做法是將其與後句連接，用逗號引出舉例內容。建議學習連接詞或插入語的正確使用，避免不完整句（fragment）。

× Of course, I still remember when I was 10 years old, my parents took me to the Shanghai's museum and visit Disneyland.

✓ Of course, I still remember when I was 10 years old my parents took me to the Shanghai museum and visited Disneyland.

句中有兩處時態與形式問題：1) “the Shanghai's museum” 中不應使用所有格和定冠詞結合，正確為 “the Shanghai museum” 或 “Shanghai Museum”（專有名詞）；2) 並列描述過去的兩個動作時，動詞需保持一致的過去式，應將“visit”改為過去式“visited”。建議在描述過去經歷時把動詞統一為過去式，並注意專有名詞和定冠詞的搭配。

× Of course, I still remember when I was 10 years old, my parents took me to the Shanghai's museum and visit Disneyland.

✓ Of course, I still remember when I was 10 years old my parents took me to the Shanghai museum and visited Disneyland.

原句中的“the Shanghai's museum”使用不當：地名加所有格並不自然。對於特定機構可用“the Shanghai Museum” 或簡化為“Shanghai museum”。建議記住專有名詞的常見形式，不要隨意添加所有格 's。

× It's a really wonderful experience I like a lot.

✓ It was a really wonderful experience that I liked a lot.

該句描述過去經歷，主句時態應為過去（was/liked），且需要連接詞“that”或使用逗號斷開以使從句更清晰。原句混合現在時和過去時（It's ... I like）造成時態與句子結構錯誤。建議在敘述過去事件時保持全句過去時態並使用適當連接詞。