Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 発音と流暢さを改善し、文の構造を明確にして冗長な間投詞（uh, um）を減らす必要があります。また、“airbrain”のような誤った語を正しい語（airplane）に置き換え、理由を簡潔に述べる際は接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って論理を整えてください。回答は最大5文に収め、具体的な描写（窓から見えるもの）を加えると良いです。

예시: Yes, I prefer the window seat. I enjoy looking out because the view from an airplane is unique and you can see landscapes and coastlines that aren’t visible from the ground. For example, I like watching cities, rivers and mountain ranges pass beneath me. This makes flying feel more exciting and relaxing.

제안: 文法を整えて時制を一貫させ、情報を明確に伝えてください。現在完了と過去形を混同しないようにし、時期や期間を具体的に述べると良いです。接続詞（because, when, so）を使って理由や背景を流れよく説明し、可能なら旅の内容や思い出を一つ加えて具体性を出してください。

예시: Yes, I did. I lived in Germany for three years when I was in junior high school, so my family and I often took long trips around Europe. For instance, we once drove across Germany to visit historic towns and I remember being amazed by the castles and countryside.

× I often uh, light, uh, airbrain.

✓ I often, uh, fly by airplane.

The original uses incorrect word 'light' and misspells 'airplane' as 'airbrain', producing an ungrammatical phrase. Use the verb 'fly' for travelling by plane and the noun 'airplane'. Keep a clear subject-verb-object order: 'I often fly by airplane.' Alternatively, 'I often fly' or 'I often travel by plane.' Be careful with word choice and pronunciation when speaking; practice the collocations 'fly by plane/airplane'.

× So it uh, it is a wonderful experience uh, to look the scenery from uh, airplane because, uh, we cannot uh, look at sea from.

✓ So it is a wonderful experience to look at the scenery from the airplane, because we cannot see the sea from the ground.

Several errors: the verb 'look' needs the preposition 'at' with 'scenery' (look at the scenery), and 'from airplane' needs the article 'the' (from the airplane). The clause 'we cannot look at sea from' is incomplete and needs an object or location; use 'see the sea from the ground' or 'from the road'. Also remove redundant 'it' and filler words. Maintain complete clauses: 'we cannot see the sea from the ground.' Ensure correct prepositions and articles.

× Yeah, I had experienced that because I had, I have lived Germany for three years, so when I was junior high school student.

✓ Yes, I experienced that because I lived in Germany for three years when I was a junior high school student.

Mixes past perfect ('had experienced','had') with present perfect ('have lived') inappropriately. Use simple past 'experienced' and 'lived' for completed actions at a specific time in the past ('when I was a junior high school student'). Also include the preposition 'in' for countries ('lived in Germany') and the article 'a' before 'junior high school student.' Avoid unnecessary tense shifts; use consistent past tense for past events.