Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct word order and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g. "see the scenery", "varies" → "changes"). Avoid redundancy and stay within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can see the passing scenery. For example, I enjoy watching mountains, rivers and towns change as we move, which makes the journey more memorable.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail with clear linking words. Fix grammar (past tense, articles, plurals) and remove hesitations. Give one concrete example (where you went, who came) to make it specific and coherent.

예시: No, I didn't have any long journeys with my family when I was a child. Instead, we often took short trips of two or three hours to visit relatives or nearby parks, such as weekend drives to my grandparents' village.

× I prefer to sit by the window when traveling since I have many opportunities to see go to scenery outside the transportation for the and it varies.

✓ I prefer to sit by the window when traveling because I have many opportunities to see the scenery outside.

The original sentence contains multiple preposition and word-order errors: 'see go to scenery outside the transportation for the and it varies' is ungrammatical. Use 'because' instead of 'since' if you want a clear reason, and 'see the scenery outside' is the correct collocation. Remove redundant phrases like 'go to' and 'the transportation for the and it varies' which do not fit. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'scenery' because 'scenery' is being specified here. Suggestion: simplify the clause and keep prepositions directly linked to nouns (e.g., 'by the window', 'outside').

× It's very unforgettable memories for me.

✓ They are very unforgettable memories for me.

The subject 'memories' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should match. 'It's' is singular contraction of 'it is' which does not agree with plural 'memories'. Use 'They are' or revise to 'It is a very unforgettable memory for me' if referring to one memory. Also 'unforgettable' already modifies 'memories', so ensure subject-verb agreement.

× No, I didn't have a long journey with my family when I child, but I got many short journey, especially just the the trip that just contains two or three hours because it was when I when I when my family go to our.

✓ No, I didn't have long journeys with my family when I was a child, but I had many short trips, especially trips that lasted only two or three hours when my family traveled.

Multiple tense and word-form errors: use 'was' for 'when I was a child' (copular past). 'Didn't have' is fine, but 'long journey' should be plural 'long journeys' to match context. 'Got' is informal and wrong here; use past simple 'had' for possessions/experiences. 'Short journey' should be plural 'short trips'. 'Contains two or three hours' is incorrect collocation; say 'lasted two or three hours'. The phrase 'when my family go to our' is ungrammatical; use 'when my family traveled' or 'when my family went somewhere'. Ensure consistent past tense throughout.