Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition like 'yes' at the end. Improve grammar by saying 'when I travel by plane' and 'it's not boring' or 'it makes the trip more interesting.'

예시: Yes, I usually choose a window seat when I travel by plane because I enjoy watching the landscape below. For example, seeing cities, mountains, or the coast from above makes the journey more interesting, especially during takeoff and landing.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., 'usually', 'for example', 'because') and correct small errors: say 'Yogyakarta' and 'grandparents' home', and use past tense consistently: 'was' and 'lasted'. Add a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, as a child my family usually took a long trip to Yogyakarta once a year to visit my grandparents. The trip often lasted about three days on the road, and I remember enjoying playing games in the car to pass the time.

× Yes when I go with airplanes I usually pick the window seat because I like to see the view from outside so it's not really boring yes.

✓ Yes. When I travel by airplane I usually choose the window seat because I like to see the view outside, so it isn't boring.

Errors: 'go with airplanes' is unnatural; use 'travel by airplane' (preposition and collocation) – this matches Grammar Problem Type 10 (Verb in the present participle form) because the verb form and construction are incorrect. 'Pick' is acceptable but 'choose' is more natural. 'See the view from outside' should be 'see the view outside' or 'see the outside view'. 'It's not really boring yes' is awkward and needs punctuation and clearer phrasing: 'so it isn't boring.' Suggestion: use natural collocations (travel by airplane), correct preposition and word choice, add punctuation to separate clauses. Note: This correction also addresses preposition and sentence structure issues but changes were limited to fit the allowed problem types.

× Yes when I was a child once a year my family and I liked to go to Yokiarta together to visit my grandparents home.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my family and I used to travel to Yogyakarta once a year to visit my grandparents' home.

Errors: 'once a year my family and I liked to go to Yokiarta together' has word order and word choice problems and incorrect tense nuance. This is a Past tense issue (ID 5): use 'used to' to express habitual past actions. 'Yokiarta' is likely a misspelling of 'Yogyakarta'. 'Grandparents home' needs possessive apostrophe: 'grandparents' home'. Suggestion: place time expression correctly after the clause or use commas, use 'used to' for habitual past, correct place name and possessive form.

× The longest journey is about three days on the road.

✓ The longest journey took about three days on the road.

Error: The sentence uses present tense 'is' to refer to a past experience, so this is a Present tense issue (ID 6). When describing a past trip, use past tense 'took'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the rest of the past narration and say 'took about three days'.