Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct tense and remove repetition. For example, say you like window seats to enjoy scenery and to relax, and give a specific example of a view you remember.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I like window seats because I can enjoy the scenery and relax; for example, on a recent trip I watched the coastline and mountains go by, which made the journey much more memorable.

제안: Answer directly with correct tense and add specific details. Use a topic sentence stating the trip, then briefly describe when, where, duration, and one memorable detail. Use linking words like 'and' or 'because' to connect ideas, and avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was five, my family and I spent about a week on Abali Island, and it was very exciting. I remember exploring the beaches and trying local food, which made the trip special because I experienced new activities at a young age.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when when I traveling because I want to see the views during my vacation, especially traveling, so I want to see them all.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I am traveling because I want to see the views during my vacation, especially when I am traveling, so I want to see them all.

The sentence uses 'I traveling' which is missing the auxiliary and needs the present participle form with a verb 'to be' (am traveling). According to the 'Verb + -ing form' rule, use 'am/is/are + -ing' for continuous actions. Also removed the duplicated 'when' and clarified the repeated idea by adding 'when I am traveling'. Suggestion: use 'I am traveling' for the continuous tense and avoid repeating phrases; 'especially when I am traveling' is clearer.

× Yes, I have I I travelled to Abali Island when I was five years old with my family around a week it was so excited and

✓ Yes, I travelled to Abali Island with my family when I was five years old; we stayed for about a week and it was very exciting.

The original has repeated words ('I have I I'), incorrect word order, missing punctuation, and wrong adjective use ('excited' instead of 'exciting' to describe the experience). This fits 'Sentence structure errors'. Correction fixes repetition, places time phrase ('when I was five') after the trip subject for clarity, adds duration ('about a week'), and uses 'it was very exciting' to describe the trip. Suggestion: remove repeated fragments, use appropriate connectors and punctuation, and choose the correct adjective form to describe events ('exciting' for events, 'excited' for people).