Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence, then one or two concise supporting reasons with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'broaden my horizons', 'I love looking at new places'). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the landscape. For example, on flights I like watching cities and mountains pass below, which helps me relax and feel excited about visiting a new place.

제안: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you went, what you did, a memorable moment). Use correct grammar for past tense and linking words like 'for example' or 'we often'. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I often went on long trips with my family when I was a child. For example, we used to go camping every summer, and I remember one trip when we hiked to a lake and cooked outdoors, which was very fun and brought us closer together.

× I prefer to, uh, sit in the, uh, near the window because I love traveling and traveling was a broading my horizon and I love drink too much.

✓ I prefer to sit near the window because I love traveling; traveling broadens my horizons and I love drinking a lot.

Errors: 'sit in the, uh, near the window' has extra preposition and disfluency; remove 'in' to form 'sit near the window' (preposition use; ID 11). 'traveling was a broading my horizon' misuses past tense and present participle; correct is present simple 'broadens' to describe a habitual effect (Present tense issue; ID 6) and use plural 'horizons' (Singular and plural issue; ID 1). 'I love drink too much' uses base verb 'drink' instead of gerund 'drinking' after 'love' (Verb + -ing form; ID 8) and 'too much' is awkward here so 'a lot' is clearer (Adverb/adjective choice; ID 13). Suggestions: remove filler words, use 'sit near the window', use present simple 'broadens' for general truths, use plural 'horizons', and use gerund after 'love' when expressing preference ('love drinking').

× As a child my family always go long trips and we are very journeys are very funny and I like my family with the go trailing.

✓ As a child my family always went on long trips; the journeys were very fun and I enjoyed going on trails with my family.

Errors: 'my family always go long trips' mixes past context 'As a child' with present verb 'go'; use past simple 'went' (Past tense issue; ID 5). Also missing preposition: 'went on long trips' (Preposition issue; ID 11). 'we are very journeys are very funny' is ungrammatical (Sentence structure error; ID 26) and 'funny' is wrong word choice for enjoyable; use 'the journeys were very fun' (Adjective choice; ID 13 and Past tense ID 5). 'I like my family with the go trailing' is incorrect order and verb form; in past context use 'I enjoyed going on trails with my family' or 'I liked going hiking with my family' (Verb + -ing form ID 8 and Sentence structure ID 26). Suggestions: keep past tense throughout when referring to childhood, use 'went on' for trips, replace 'funny' with 'fun' or 'enjoyable', and use 'enjoyed going' or 'liked going' + gerund for activities.