Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar, redundancy and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid repeating words. Add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector (e.g., "because" or "so") to make the answer more natural and informative. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like seeing clouds, mountains and cities from above, which helps me relax. Also, sitting by the window lets me take photos during the flight.

제안: Correct past tense and word order, and avoid combining forms incorrectly. Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, then give specific details about the trip using linking words (e.g., "and," "because," "for example"). Provide one or two vivid details to make the memory clear and personal.

예시: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. For example, we drove for eight hours to visit my grandparents, and I remember playing games in the back seat and stopping at interesting roadside attractions, which made the day very special for me.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I traveling because I I am watching the sky view.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I am traveling because I like watching the sky.

Error type: incorrect use of verb + -ing form and redundant/misplaced words. 'when I traveling' omits the auxiliary verb 'am' required for the present continuous 'am traveling'. 'I I am watching' repeats 'I' and uses present continuous 'am watching' awkwardly for preference; 'like watching' is more natural to express habitual preference. Also 'sky view' is unnatural; use 'the sky' or 'watching the sky'. Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary for continuous tenses, remove duplicated words, and use natural collocations (like 'watching the sky').

× Yes I had was a long journey with our my family.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family.

Error type: incorrect past tense construction and incorrect pronoun. The original combines two verbs 'had' and 'was' unnecessarily; use one past tense verb 'had'. 'our my family' contains two possessive pronouns; choose the appropriate single form 'my family'. Suggestion: Use a single correct past tense verb and one possessive pronoun.

× This is very great day for me.

✓ That was a very great day for me.

Error type: sentence structure and tense agreement. The student refers to a past event ('as a child' and 'had a long journey'), so the sentence should be in the past tense: 'That was a very great day for me.' Also it needs the definite article 'a' before 'very great day' and the demonstrative 'that' to refer back to the event. Suggestion: Match tense to context, include required articles, and use an appropriate demonstrative pronoun to refer to a past event.